Mirrors

[EndHasAStart]

I haven't spent ages pouring over this song like I have done with the others that I've posted (perhaps to their detriment), so here are the two verses that I've come up with so far. What I'm trying to get across is the feeling of seeing problems in people, or society, and having all the solutions, yet being fairly arrogant with my own problems.



I can be a heartless guy
When closed curtains cut my sight
I can be the dangerous type
When nothing lines up right
Well I can see salvation
When I watch their spirits die
But I can't take salvation
Because I've pencilled-in my eyes

I've burned holes in sunshine
To repair the broken flames
But I can't love or live like this
When I can't burn my own name
Well I won't lose hope
To probing mirrors and bottled shame
But I shouldn't be so hopeful
With a conscience so far away


Any thoughts would be appreciated :)

[lfdfforever]

I've burned holes in sunshine
To repair the broken flames

I like these two lines.

[gup]

I really really liked it, definatly my fav so far on this site. keep writing

[swallowURpride]

very deep and poetic, i love it!

[EndHasAStart]

I've burned holes in sunshine
To repair the broken flames

I like these two lines.


Somehow those two lines came out of absolutely nowhere; I think I was just in the zone as it were. I'm proud of them, nonetheless :P

I really really liked it, definatly my fav so far on this site. keep writing

Wow thanks - but have a look at some older posts and there are plenty of people who are a lot better than me! Embarrasingly though, I can't name any.

very deep and poetic, i love it!

Thanks :)

[monochromatic]

i love this, i can tell you've put a lot of effort into this. it's like you've taken the words i've been trying to write and perfectly written them down. keep it up. :)