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Mike Smith
01/30/10, 10:52 AM
Carved out of a powerful rock lies a great statue,
Formed from the best metals and plastered with gold,
And its covered with warmth when the skies are blue,
It serves as a tower for nature and people when it's cold.

The brush of fingers will unveil its name,
And those forgotten in time since conquered,
A cocky shadow of time all the same,
Voiced cries, yearning for souls without a word.

Dark hairs remembered no more here,
And acts of virtue drove down to the grave,
Only fresh cut grass and concrete lay near,
A constant reminder of the free, the brave.

Etched lines of despair and thought surround the face,
A sword buried beneath a muscular hand,
As if it were to reach out, and conquer the place,
With its destiny left to deteriorate into coarse sand.

Tons of people go by this way around mid-noon,
And admire the knowledge of the evening,
And they shout with strife to the shining moon,
But in the shadows that follow, theres nothing to bring.

A woman with nothing special comes forward,
And her eyes widen at the image of a warrior for a while,
Leaving she leaves a kiss and a rose with no final words,
Right before the statue's somber grin comes to a smile.

silver1
01/30/10, 03:25 PM
Pretty good. A little wordy for my tastes, but the poem in itself flows rather well and the imagery is exceptional.

Mike Smith
01/30/10, 03:49 PM
Pretty good. A little wordy for my tastes, but the poem in itself flows rather well and the imagery is exceptional.

Thanka man. Glad you like it. I know its wordy, but sometimes i like to make them wordy because they come out better.

And you like the imagery huh? What did you think of when you read this since you think the imagery is good?

Triqii101
04/05/10, 10:43 AM
I agree that it's a bit worthy, but that is what I like sometimes. So very well done!