new song my bands been writing take a lookKK!!!!

[dylansuperior]

i could pretend that i feel okay
i could fake that smile like you do everyday
and my friends will know that somethings wrong
and i miss those days when we got along

theres a storm ahead and its bound to blow though
the rough seas again will tear me away from you

its time for us to abandon ship
weve taken to much water now we cant save this
its the captains orders and were sinking fast
and if we dont act now then well never last(never last)


missing a second verse :(

[wholeofheart]

1st verse is the key!

[Idealist80]

i could pretend that i feel okay
i could fake that smile like you do everyday
and my friends will know that somethings wrong
and i miss those days when we got along

theres a storm ahead and its bound to blow though
the rough seas again will tear me away from you

its time for us to abandon ship
weve taken to much water now we cant save this
its the captains orders and were sinking fast
and if we dont act now then well never last(never last)


missing a second verse :(


alot of cliches here

the whole abandon/sinking ship thing, fake smile / okay

if you can think of a unique way of changing those words might not be bad

[dylansuperior]

alot of cliches here

the whole abandon/sinking ship thing, fake smile / okay

if you can think of a unique way of changing those words might not be bad


ya i get what you mean. im having trouble writing a second verse.; and my bands recording soon D:

[Blackend_Tearz]

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[dylansuperior]

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thanks dude