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LikeSwingSets
02/06/10, 03:21 PM
by true story i mean it comes from true experiences, there was no burning city though, or wolves :)

idk if anyone'll read this cos i rarely post but it'd be nice to get some feedback even if it's negative, but please if you're gonna be negative do so in a constructive way.

these may be terrible but for a long time i've needed to get this written down in some way, it's a lot more emotional than it'll read i think :)

enjoy!

Gypsum Fantastic

you built me a bridge
on the other side, a shining city
i gladly crossed, you watched me walk and warn
you did not

i saw people screaming within
swore they would not affect me
just for a moment, i felt safe
but not a touch, not a taste

could save me from the flames

the bright city crumbled, fell at your feet
embers smoulder in the hearts of the weak
how many more must you break til i see
that you're just no good for me

buried beneath the rubble, i heard your voice call out
a saviour, again, to pull me out the ground
i forced my hand out, and found yours
but you never try hard enough

you've never tried hard enough

the bright city crumbled, fell at your feet
embers smoulder in the hearts of the weak
how many more must you break til i see
that you're just no good for me

and looking back i wonder why
i took my heart, so cold and dry
and left it in your hands so you
could rip it up and throw it to
the wolves who tore it further and
who laughing, filled my wounds with sand
opened my skin at your command
so in my blood you'd wash your hands

but now i'm blessed with love you see
you'll never mean a thing to me
and once again i'll take my heart
but for the hands of the one i love

forever i'll lie with her there
in the arms of one who cares

wholeofheart
02/06/10, 05:44 PM
some small glitchie parts but gooood chorus

LikeSwingSets
02/07/10, 01:23 AM
some small glitchie parts but gooood chorus

which bits in particular do you think should be changed?

thanks for the feedback :)

onefallingstar
02/07/10, 06:11 AM
i'm really liking this part:

the bright city crumbled, fell at your feet
embers smoulder in the hearts of the weak
how many more must you break til i see
that you're just no good for me

LikeSwingSets
02/07/10, 06:54 AM
i'm really liking this part:

the bright city crumbled, fell at your feet
embers smoulder in the hearts of the weak
how many more must you break til i see
that you're just no good for me

sounds like i really hit it off with the chorus
:)

any particular reason that bit stands out to you?

just to help visualise the last bits, the longest section is quite quick and then it's real nice and slower for the next bit and the last two lines are sung with no music

sounds kinda pretty, it's meant to anyways :)