I need opinions on this poem

[beccasaysXRAWRX]

I actualy wrote this for school its kind of about how music is pretty much my life. please rate 1-10 and tell me what you do and dont like thank you :)

cardboard and plastic encase discs that fill the empty gaping holes of my soul
run my fingers over them
too much of this is never enough
sound comes from speakers
I dont need anything more than this
Its like I can see the emotion in the chords flowing into my ears
living my life in four four time
If this track skips a beat i will too

[zafruz]

9 very well writen

[ClydeMcAllister]

Cool poem bro. Very straightforward and honest.

[beccasaysXRAWRX]

thank you :)

[020jeffs]

9 out of ten
very abstract

[LeetSkeetz]

It Is Very Delicious :]

[Jabble524]

It's good, but I think you could expand on it. Really take the reader inside the world you experience when you're listening to music and let them see what you see.

[chiodos_xt3aas]

After taking 3 college level creative writing classes I think this would probably get a 6 and thats being grateful. One thing is that the lines read so much like prose. It's like I am reading a bunch of lines just jotted down. They don't really seem to flow well. Another thing is the length of the lines. Generally you want to keep them around the same length. Those two long ones just seem to distract the view. I would shorten them simply by entering a break. Try not to end every line with the end of a sentence. A poem is meant to be read straight without having to stop at the end of every line.