Beggining of a new song opinions needed

[beccasaysXRAWRX]

please give me you opinion thank you :)

gasp for air theres nothing there
grasping for something
screaming my last desperate plea to rescue my sanity
thanks for this
you can sing yourself to sleep but the pain will still be there tomorrow
im asking you for a second chance

ill beg and ill plead
ill cut and ill bleed
youll describe to me what its like to feel nothing at all

[swallowURpride]

not bad

[020jeffs]

I could imagine music to it
therefore its good
plus i like the lyrics

[LeetSkeetz]

not too bad i liked it

[Jabble524]

I like these. They really convey the emotions of loneliness and emptiness quite well.