PH Levels - Another song by my friend

[bass ampss]

Lights down in the city
Where i spen most of my years
I've had bad feelings
Where it all seems to dissapear
Flow into the concrete
Where time is never seen
Some spend there money
So that they can drink for
Free

Lights down in the city
Where Ii spend most of my time
All these pages of skylights portraits
seem to make everything
Alright

It's intersecting
These edges make our home
It's intersecting

[a speedo model]

it's okay. but there's was just something about it that didn't click with me, it just never seemed to take off. keep working on it, though.

[sk8r punk]

I do feel something when I read it...and yeah i kinda agree with the guy before me...i still like it though...XI

[parallelism]

I like this, the ending of the first stanza is very clever.
A bit short, but good.