Here's a rap I wrote, describing the feelings I wish i could set free

[020jeffs]

I am the catalytic critic the cynic of idyllic minutes
This world is imperfect and so is everything in it.
The evil needle, injecting pain into every minute
Every single massacre 3 guesses who did it.
I am the logical, of the impossible uncrossable
The pain of abortion and a billion hospitals
Collected, into my mind infected
Not even the best can asses the wreckage.
By convention, I am your infinite dimension
By the depths of genius I am the greatest invention
It’s not about attacking or tracking nobody’s slacking
I’m a turbulent disturbance, I’m unpacking I’m hatching
I’m changing, the amazing that was waiting escaping
I’m taking the scrapings of the world that is shaking
I’m invisible, I’m the invincible principle
The Psychological and medical Incredible Miracle
A million civilians fearing every syllable
The terrible parable killing all that is killable
And all else that isn’t is awaiting my visit
Where ill deploy and destroy and nothing I create will miss it.
I’m the scariest piece of the hairiest beast
Tearing my leash and preparing to feast.
Filthiest claws ready to rip you to shreds
Injecting infecting and severing heads
The architect of every sick shipwreck
The blade that played in every severing neck
There’s no benevolent text, no words that protect
Just chronicles of horrible sent direct to infect.
Hell bent this, and now I’m relentless
Years of pain have been sent to invent this.
Witness the Convulsions of a thousand explosions
As I explode and time ruptures from my chemical potions
All the supersonic stars couldn’t combine to break me
I am the twisted turmoil has compiled to make me
I am the Richter scale and nothing can shake me
This is the world that I hate and I hope that it hates me
Stand back, as I expand and contract
Multiple disorders and ideas react
There’s no stopping me from properly dropping atomically
I’m maniacally diabolical shockingly and impossibly
I have awoken from all that is evil and broken
I am choking the world and as its people have spoken
I challenge thee to banish me to a very distant galaxy
I am fear hate and violence you can’t stop this world from having me
The terrorists and dictators are the people here that channel me
I will strike down with upon those who utilise me happily

[mymomsapanda]

this is pretty good. i can feel the beat

[LeetSkeetz]

This was the most bad ass thing i've ever read dude, noice :]

[Jabble524]

The lyrics are very good and very creative, reminded me a little of Immortal Technique. But without actually hearing you with a beat I couldn't say for sure. Rapping in the aggressive style that your lyrics are written in is a very fine line, between sounding legitimate and just silly. Technique, Pac, Zack de la Rocha, etc can all pull it off. But there are other rappers or rap metal bands who just sound fake. I could picture these lyrics behind rapped over a really brooding / ominous beat.

[020jeffs]

Come On Guys! Feedback

[introduction]

i don't know anything about rap, but i thought that was great.

[Xx sorrow xX]

I normally never care for rap i usually sign it off as nothing

But here i felt your emotion and voice very creative and edgy but don't take my word for it i never listen to rap

[Boddah26]

Reminds me a little of lyrics by The Used. That's a compliment, by the way.

[matchbox202006]

I am mindblown :)

http://www.myspace.com/exclusivemcs

[thegraveyard]

i know this song cause it's immortal technique. I've listened to it 1000 times. Dont steal other peoples shit.

[020jeffs]

i know this song cause it's immortal technique. I've listened to it 1000 times. Dont steal other peoples shit.

You're a fucking retard
This is NOT Immortal Technique because I wrote it myself
If you can find this song being rapped by Immortal Technique then I'm fucking rich because I fucking wrote it
You're a fool
Immortal never rapped this.

[SvennyBoy]

i like it dude

[Grohl]

I am the catalytic critic the cynic of idyllic minutes
This world is imperfect and so is everything in it.
The evil needle, injecting pain into every minute
Every single massacre 3 guesses who did it.
I am the logical, of the impossible uncrossable
The pain of abortion and a billion hospitals
Collected, into my mind infected
Not even the best can asses the wreckage.
By convention, I am your infinite dimension
By the depths of genius I am the greatest invention
It’s not about attacking or tracking nobody’s slacking
I’m a turbulent disturbance, I’m unpacking I’m hatching
I’m changing, the amazing that was waiting escaping
I’m taking the scrapings of the world that is shaking
I’m invisible, I’m the invincible principle
The Psychological and medical Incredible Miracle
A million civilians fearing every syllable
The terrible parable killing all that is killable
And all else that isn’t is awaiting my visit
Where ill deploy and destroy and nothing I create will miss it.
I’m the scariest piece of the hairiest beast
Tearing my leash and preparing to feast.
Filthiest claws ready to rip you to shreds
Injecting infecting and severing heads
The architect of every sick shipwreck
The blade that played in every severing neck
There’s no benevolent text, no words that protect
Just chronicles of horrible sent direct to infect.
Hell bent this, and now I’m relentless
Years of pain have been sent to invent this.
Witness the Convulsions of a thousand explosions
As I explode and time ruptures from my chemical potions
All the supersonic stars couldn’t combine to break me
I am the twisted turmoil has compiled to make me
I am the Richter scale and nothing can shake me
This is the world that I hate and I hope that it hates me
Stand back, as I expand and contract
Multiple disorders and ideas react
There’s no stopping me from properly dropping atomically
I’m maniacally diabolical shockingly and impossibly
I have awoken from all that is evil and broken
I am choking the world and as its people have spoken
I challenge thee to banish me to a very distant galaxy
I am fear hate and violence you can’t stop this world from having me
The terrorists and dictators are the people here that channel me
I will strike down with upon those who utilise me happily


Definitely have a grasp on intellectual rap lyricism on par with early Common, Nas, or Lupe Fiasco. You weave some great imagery with pathos.

[thegraveyard]

do you post on a different site?or just this one?

[xmy.only.exitx]

great creativity and the boldness of imagination. :]

[020jeffs]

do you post on a different site?or just this one?

I post on 3 different sites

[Idealist80]

I am the catalytic critic the cynic of idyllic minutes
This world is imperfect and so is everything in it.
The evil needle, injecting pain into every minute
Every single massacre 3 guesses who did it.
I am the logical, of the impossible uncrossable
The pain of abortion and a billion hospitals
Collected, into my mind infected
Not even the best can asses the wreckage.
By convention, I am your infinite dimension
By the depths of genius I am the greatest invention
It’s not about attacking or tracking nobody’s slacking
I’m a turbulent disturbance, I’m unpacking I’m hatching
I’m changing, the amazing that was waiting escaping
I’m taking the scrapings of the world that is shaking
I’m invisible, I’m the invincible principle
The Psychological and medical Incredible Miracle
A million civilians fearing every syllable
The terrible parable killing all that is killable
And all else that isn’t is awaiting my visit
Where ill deploy and destroy and nothing I create will miss it.
I’m the scariest piece of the hairiest beast
Tearing my leash and preparing to feast.
Filthiest claws ready to rip you to shreds
Injecting infecting and severing heads
The architect of every sick shipwreck
The blade that played in every severing neck
There’s no benevolent text, no words that protect
Just chronicles of horrible sent direct to infect.
Hell bent this, and now I’m relentless
Years of pain have been sent to invent this.
Witness the Convulsions of a thousand explosions
As I explode and time ruptures from my chemical potions
All the supersonic stars couldn’t combine to break me
I am the twisted turmoil has compiled to make me
I am the Richter scale and nothing can shake me
This is the world that I hate and I hope that it hates me
Stand back, as I expand and contract
Multiple disorders and ideas react
There’s no stopping me from properly dropping atomically
I’m maniacally diabolical shockingly and impossibly
I have awoken from all that is evil and broken
I am choking the world and as its people have spoken
I challenge thee to banish me to a very distant galaxy
I am fear hate and violence you can’t stop this world from having me
The terrorists and dictators are the people here that channel me
I will strike down with upon those who utilise me happily




you didn't write this, nice try tho

[020jeffs]

you didn't write this, nice try tho

Why does every one keep telling me I didn't write this?
Some one obviously wrote it.
And that some one was me. This appears in NONE of Immortal Techniques songs
NONE of Twisters songs
and no other song that has EVER been professionally recorded. If you know of a song that uses these lyrics then please tell me, because it will make me a very rich man.

Until then, fuck off, and stop hating. I wrote these lyrics, EVERY SINGLE LINE is a product of my mind. and NO ONE elses.

[slamdown]

I believe this guy wrote this himself guys, stop hatin' so to speak. I think the problem is that they are so good, so professional and so reminiscent of some of the best rap lyricists out there such as Immortal Technique that it's easy to presume he must have ripped them from someone else.

You'll know if you wrote them or not dude, for what's it's worth I reckon you did, and that's what matters. You have a real talent, I write but I wish I could do so with as much skill as you. Sorry if I'm going on a bit, I'm just genuinely taken aback by the quality of these lyrics. I'd love to see more of your stuff and see if you can write to this standard consistently.

[020jeffs]

Hey Slam thanks for the support
Glad to know some one appreciates this as I'm quite proud of it

Here's all the stuff I've posted I'd love to hear what you think of some of them.
http://www.absolutepunk.net/search.php?searchid=43926902

Some are better than others, and some follow a deeper theme, the theme in this one is only subtly followed.

There are 3 full songs in there if you wanna check them out they are:
"A message that needs to be heard"
"I'm so crazy"
"Time of our lives"

Thanks a lot for the feedback and I hope to hear from you

[zagarino]

gr8

[zagarino]

nice

[zagarino]

co0ol

[zagarino]

not bad

[zagarino]

amazing

[zagarino]

marvellous

[zagarino]

really good

[zagarino]

shit i must post 15 posts to be able to add a new thread......what's this shit?

[zagarino]

niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee ee

[zagarino]

wonderful

[zagarino]

remarkable

[zagarino]

thxxxxxxxxx i did it

[heyben]

like!!

[Hmph]

Nice! I could definitely find the rhythm in this.

[020jeffs]

SUPER BUMP!!
Another piece I just wanted to revive

[matchbox202006]

Niiiice

[matchbox202006]

http://www.myspace.com/exclusivemcs

[020jeffs]

http://www.myspace.com/exclusivemcs

Why did you post this?

[matchbox202006]

Why did you post this?

it's my work, and i figured it was related and maybe you would be interested.

[020jeffs]

it's my work, and i figured it was related and maybe you would be interested.

Oh I didn't know it was you lol

I thought you just linked me to some random guys Myspace.

[The Indigo]

1) A lot of it is nonsensical wordplay. It'd probably impress the kind of 13 year old white kids who still think Eminem is the greatest rapper on the planet, but beyond that, it's pretty pointless.

2) There's no way you wrote this. It's nothing like the other piece you posted, although they're both shitty, just shitty in different ways. GTFO.

[020jeffs]

1) A lot of it is nonsensical wordplay. It'd probably impress the kind of 13 year old white kids who still think Eminem is the greatest rapper on the planet, but beyond that, it's pretty pointless.

2) There's no way you wrote this. It's nothing like the other piece you posted, although they're both shitty, just shitty in different ways. GTFO.

I'll give you all my money if you can prove I didn't write this.

You're the most useless contribution to anything ever to have existed.
If I shat in a box it would contribute to the world better than you do.
Go kill yourself.

[The Indigo]

I'll give you all my money if you can prove I didn't write this.

You're the most useless contribution to anything ever to have existed.
If I shat in a box it would contribute to the world better than you do.
Go kill yourself.
Tough guy.

[crackedthesky]

I'll give you all my money if you can prove I didn't write this.

You're the most useless contribution to anything ever to have existed.
If I shat in a box it would contribute to the world better than you do.
Go kill yourself.

I understand that the guy is obviously not a fan of yours, but you do know you can respond to criticism/insult without completely flying off the handle, right?

[020jeffs]

Tough guy.

Oh what's that?
You can't prove that I didn't write this piece?
Because you're useless?

Thought as much.

[020jeffs]

I understand that the guy is obviously not a fan of yours, but you do know you can respond to criticism/insult without completely flying off the handle, right?

I can respond to criticism well, you have seen me do so.
This complete juvenile is not giving out criticism, he's just issuing pure insult.
I am entitled to fly off the whole fucking door when supercilious idiots comment out of a stubborn and half hearted dislike.

[crackedthesky]

I can respond to criticism well, you have seen me do so.
This complete juvenile is not giving out criticism, he's just issuing pure insult.
I am entitled to fly off the whole fucking door when supercilious idiots comment out of a stubborn and half hearted dislike.

Yeah, my bad. I posted that before I saw that this guy was basically following you around and writing the same comment on every post.
Every post he even comments on, really. Personally, I find his criticism to be trite and unoriginal :shrug:

[DevinDomino]

Yeah, my bad. I posted that before I saw that this guy was basically following you around and writing the same comment on every post.
Every post he even comments on, really. Personally, I find his criticism to be trite and unoriginal :shrug:

That dude does the same thing on every single one of my post. I'm glad he went off on him like that cause that guy deserves it since he thinks he is so superior when in reality he has no purpose other than to annoy us.

Anyway, I thought your writing was simply brilliant! I'm not a huge rap fan but I know enough to know good from bad and this was thee shit!! One of the best things I've ever read. I could feel the tempo in your words so well that I almost wanted to bob my head along haha. I would probably shit myself if I heard someone drop something like that in a rap battle or something!

[The Indigo]

Oh what's that?
You can't prove that I didn't write this piece?
Because you're useless?

Thought as much.
Other than the fact that it's nothing like the other piece you posted?

[020jeffs]

Other than the fact that it's nothing like the other piece you posted?

That's not proof you dick.
I have more than one way of writing.

Who wrote it then?

Sure wasn't you, you fucking cock lover.

[The Indigo]

That's not proof you dick.
I have more than one way of writing.

Who wrote it then?

Sure wasn't you, you fucking cock lover.
Homophobia. Cool. But you know you didn't write this, dude. In one piece you find it OK to rewrite the theme over and over again and refuse any idea that it's not an OK to write, and in another you have no theme and jump randomly between topics with no other connection other than that the words are alliterate? C'mon. Those are two completely different kinds of shitty. There's no way you wrote this.

[The Indigo]

Yeah, my bad. I posted that before I saw that this guy was basically following you around and writing the same comment on every post.
Every post he even comments on, really. Personally, I find his criticism to be trite and unoriginal :shrug:
I typically come in here every now and then and comment on the first few pieces in the forum. His were on the top. :shrug: Also, I would probably learn the definition of words before I tried to use them. Comments can't be trite or unoriginal.

[DevinDomino]

It's one thing to attack someones style of writing in a manner as useless and unconstructivr as you, but to say that he didn't write it? That is fucked up!
You are a cock lover
No homo..phobia

[The Indigo]

It's pretty obvious.

[DevinDomino]

It's pretty obvious.

If you're an over analytical cynic.

[020jeffs]

I typically come in here every now and then and comment on the first few pieces in the forum. His were on the top. :shrug: Also, I would probably learn the definition of words before I tried to use them. Comments can't be trite or unoriginal.

Basically mate.
You're a cunt and nobody wants to hear from you.
Piss off, and continue wanking yourself into an early grave.

Comments CAN be trite and unoriginal.
Go crawl into the hole where your heart used to be.

[crackedthesky]

I typically come in here every now and then and comment on the first few pieces in the forum. His were on the top. :shrug: Also, I would probably learn the definition of words before I tried to use them. Comments can't be trite or unoriginal.
Lolwut

[The Indigo]

If you're an over analytical cynic.
Or if you can read.

Basically mate.
You're a cunt and nobody wants to hear from you.
Piss off, and continue wanking yourself into an early grave.

Comments CAN be trite and unoriginal.
Go crawl into the hole where your heart used to be.
Tough Guy Pt. 2

Lolwut
I could explain literary criticism concepts if you like. :shrug: Those are terms used for critiquing art. Critiques aren't art, they're an analysis of art. Therefore, they can't be trite. It seriously makes no sense.

[crackedthesky]

Or if you can read.


Tough Guy Pt. 2


I could explain literary criticism concepts if you like. :shrug: Those are terms used for critiquing art. Critiques aren't art, they're an analysis of art. Therefore, they can't be trite. It seriously makes no sense.

Really? You don't think that saying "this is unoriginal" to everything you read can be unoriginal?
If that's the case, you're as stupid as you are an asshole.

[020jeffs]

Tough Guy Pt. 2



What?
What are you talking about?
What about tough guy?
You're a deluded waster

Oh shit did I just write "Tough guy pt. 3"?

[The Indigo]

Really? You don't think that saying "this is unoriginal" to everything you read can be unoriginal?
If that's the case, you're as stupid as you are an asshole.
Just explained why it's not. You can't use critical terms to describe something noncritical. That's what I mean by saying you should learn what words mean before you use them.

[crackedthesky]

Just explained why it's not. You can't use critical terms to describe something noncritical. That's what I mean by saying you should learn what words mean before you use them.

First, yes you can.
Second, I would argue that a critique is critical.
If a song or a painting is an expression of one's self, and that is able to be critiqued, a critique is also an expression of one's self, and thus, also able to be critiqued.

[The Indigo]

First, yes you can.
Second, I would argue that a critique is critical.
If a song or a painting is an expression of one's self, and that is able to be critiqued, a critique is also an expression of one's self, and thus, also able to be critiqued.
All forms of self-expression are not art.

[crackedthesky]

All forms of self-expression are not art.

Not saying they are, just that all forms of self-expression are subject to outside critique.
Can't believe we've argued this far, it was sarcasm anyway, lol.

[matchbox202006]

Oh I didn't know it was you lol

I thought you just linked me to some random guys Myspace.

lol nah, it's my bro Matt and I. we're good, just sayin. Whatcha think?

[brettfavred]

seems pretty sketchy but it probly sounds alot better

[020jeffs]

lol nah, it's my bro Matt and I. we're good, just sayin. Whatcha think?

I'm saying that you shouldn't go round saying you're good when the only proof you have is the music on that myspace page.

I beg to differ.

[maxvsmaradona]

I am the catalytic critic the cynic of idyllic minutes
This world is imperfect and so is everything in it.
The evil needle, injecting pain into every minute
Every single massacre 3 guesses who did it.
I am the logical, of the impossible uncrossable
The pain of abortion and a billion hospitals
Collected, into my mind infected
Not even the best can asses the wreckage.
By convention, I am your infinite dimension
By the depths of genius I am the greatest invention
It’s not about attacking or tracking nobody’s slacking
I’m a turbulent disturbance, I’m unpacking I’m hatching
I’m changing, the amazing that was waiting escaping
I’m taking the scrapings of the world that is shaking
I’m invisible, I’m the invincible principle
The Psychological and medical Incredible Miracle
A million civilians fearing every syllable
The terrible parable killing all that is killable
And all else that isn’t is awaiting my visit
Where ill deploy and destroy and nothing I create will miss it.
I’m the scariest piece of the hairiest beast
Tearing my leash and preparing to feast.
Filthiest claws ready to rip you to shreds
Injecting infecting and severing heads
The architect of every sick shipwreck
The blade that played in every severing neck
There’s no benevolent text, no words that protect
Just chronicles of horrible sent direct to infect.
Hell bent this, and now I’m relentless
Years of pain have been sent to invent this.
Witness the Convulsions of a thousand explosions
As I explode and time ruptures from my chemical potions
All the supersonic stars couldn’t combine to break me
I am the twisted turmoil has compiled to make me
I am the Richter scale and nothing can shake me
This is the world that I hate and I hope that it hates me
Stand back, as I expand and contract
Multiple disorders and ideas react
There’s no stopping me from properly dropping atomically
I’m maniacally diabolical shockingly and impossibly
I have awoken from all that is evil and broken
I am choking the world and as its people have spoken
I challenge thee to banish me to a very distant galaxy
I am fear hate and violence you can’t stop this world from having me
The terrorists and dictators are the people here that channel me
I will strike down with upon those who utilise me happily

You didn't write this. I don't need proof. No white kid from London could write something like this.

[matchbox202006]

I'm saying that you shouldn't go round saying you're good when the only proof you have is the music on that myspace page.

I beg to differ.

What can I say? I'm confident.

[020jeffs]

You didn't write this. I don't need proof. No white kid from London could write something like this.

All I'm gonna take from that is a compliment.
You have expressed a like for the piece I have written.
And proceeded to call me unique.

Thanks buddy.

[maxvsmaradona]

All I'm gonna take from that is a compliment.
You have expressed a like for the piece I have written.
And proceeded to call me unique.

Thanks buddy.

Oh, quite the opposite, my dear boy. Stealing lyrics isn't unique.

[The Personist]

I don't think you stole it, but I don't think it's very good. It's a bunch of really loud and bombastic rhymes. Nothing is coherent, the word play is isolated on a line-by-line basis, and it doesn't really seem like it took more than a rhyming dictionary.

[020jeffs]

I don't think you stole it, but I don't think it's very good. It's a bunch of really loud and bombastic rhymes. Nothing is coherent, the word play is isolated on a line-by-line basis, and it doesn't really seem like it took more than a rhyming dictionary.

You're right about the word play, but there is an underlying theme, it's not just a display of rhyming skill.

Also. A rhyming dictionary? Please.
Straight from the skull, give credit where it's due.

[The Indigo]

I don't think you stole it, but I don't think it's very good. It's a bunch of really loud and bombastic rhymes. Nothing is coherent, the word play is isolated on a line-by-line basis, and it doesn't really seem like it took more than a rhyming dictionary.
Have you seen this kids other pieces? This fragmented, alliterative nightmare couldn't have possibly come from the same guy who "you're a snake" over and over again and then got mad when I told him he shouldn't do that.

[The Personist]

You're right about the word play, but there is an underlying theme, it's not just a display of rhyming skill.

Also. A rhyming dictionary? Please.
Straight from the skull, give credit where it's due.

I already said it in another thread, but I'm going to keep saying it because it bears repeating: poems (yes, raps are poems) are made of words, not ideas. I am responding to your language, not your underlying theme, just the way we respond to notes in music or colors and brush strokes in paintings.

Have you seen this kids other pieces? This fragmented, alliterative nightmare couldn't have possibly come from the same guy who "you're a snake" over and over again and then got mad when I told him he shouldn't do that.

Looked 'em up, lost faith in humanity.

[Idealist80]

You're right about the word play, but there is an underlying theme, it's not just a display of rhyming skill.

Also. A rhyming dictionary? Please.
Straight from the skull, give credit where it's due.


Quit being arrogant.
It might be straight from the "Skull" but you can always get better. Invest in a thesaurus.
And I honestly don't know if your credit is due yet. Find a general theme in your writing and stick to it, if you want credit.

[Idealist80]

I already said it in another thread, but I'm going to keep saying it because it bears repeating: poems (yes, raps are poems) are made of words, not ideas. I am responding to your language, not your underlying theme, just the way we respond to notes in music or colors and brush strokes in paintings.



Looked 'em up, lost faith in humanity.


Can you tell me what you think about, " A day in San Diego "

[020jeffs]

Oh, quite the opposite, my dear boy. Stealing lyrics isn't unique.

Yet again you shower me with compliments.
Some one had to have written this piece did they not?
That some one was me. Go ahead, google ANY single line, and you'll find it maybe on 2 other websites.
Posted be me. Because I wrote it.

You'll find it in no song, and no lyrics written by any other person.

Dick.

[Matt Chylak]

not cool to accuse you of plagiarism, but it's terrible either way so why do you care?

[020jeffs]

not cool to accuse you of plagiarism, but it's terrible either way so why do you care?

That's your opinion
There are about 20 comments on this thread saying how good it is.
When you get nearly as much praise.
You may talk.

[The Personist]

I'm published; my opinion is the only one that matters.

(if we're going to play by your stupid rules, that is)

[Matt Chylak]

i'm on itunes, therefore my opinion on music is superior to everyone in this thread's

[The Indigo]

Yet again you shower me with compliments.
Some one had to have written this piece did they not?
That some one was me. Go ahead, google ANY single line, and you'll find it maybe on 2 other websites.
Posted be me. Because I wrote it.

You'll find it in no song, and no lyrics written by any other person.

Dick.
So you're really good at plagiarizing. You still plagiarized.

[maxvsmaradona]

sounds like something POS would rap about.

and seeing how whitey isnt POS, and seeing how he didn't write it, I guess this means op sucks.

[020jeffs]

You guys are ALL just egotistical, elitist megalomaniacs.

I wrote this.

End of.

I'll take my 2300 views and say thanks to all you fuckers for telling me how good this piece is.
The more you accuse me of stealing it, the bigger my smile gets.

[The Personist]

This is a horrible piece. Did you miss the part where I said that?

[Matt Chylak]

if you read the last thing i said, you'll notice that i call your piece "terrible"

[020jeffs]

Keep those replies and views rolling in guys.
Thanks.

Your jealousy and hate only serves as a compliment to me
You've become to obsessed with my work.

[circasuicide]

You guys are ALL just egotistical, elitist megalomaniacs.

I wrote this.

End of.

I'll take my 2300 views and say thanks to all you fuckers for telling me how good this piece is.
The more you accuse me of stealing it, the bigger my smile gets.

AK_7TGhayuA&ob=av2e

[circasuicide]

Reminds me a little of lyrics by The Used. That's a compliment, by the way.

if your username is in reference to what i think it is, you're awesome.

[020jeffs]

AK_7TGhayuA&ob=av2e

LOL
you posted a whole video just for one of the words I used?

[The Indigo]

Here's a rap I wrote, describing the feelings I wish I could set free.


Today is going to be the day
That they're going to throw it back to you
By now you should have somehow
Realized what you've got to do
I don't believe that anybody feels the way I do
About you now

Back beat, the word is on the street
That the fire in your heart is out
I'm sure you've heard it all before
But you never really had a doubt
I don't believe that anybody feels the way I do
About you now

And all the roads we have to walk are winding
And all the lights that lead us there are blinding
There are many things that I would like to say to you
But I don't know how

Because maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
And after all
You're my wonderwall

Today was going to be the day
But they'll never throw it back to you
By now you should have somehow
Realized what you're not to do
I don't believe that anybody feels the way I do
About you now

And all the roads that lead you there were winding
And all the lights that light the way are blinding
There are many things that I would like to say to you
But I don't know how

I said maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
And after all
You're my wonderwall

I said maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
And after all
You're my wonderwall

I said maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
You're going to be the one that saves me
You're going to be the one that saves me

[020jeffs]

Here's a rap I wrote, describing the feelings I wish I could set free.


Today is going to be the day
That they're going to throw it back to you
By now you should have somehow
Realized what you've got to do
I don't believe that anybody feels the way I do
About you now

Back beat, the word is on the street
That the fire in your heart is out
I'm sure you've heard it all before
But you never really had a doubt
I don't believe that anybody feels the way I do
About you now

And all the roads we have to walk are winding
And all the lights that lead us there are blinding
There are many things that I would like to say to you
But I don't know how

Because maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
And after all
You're my wonderwall

Today was going to be the day
But they'll never throw it back to you
By now you should have somehow
Realized what you're not to do
I don't believe that anybody feels the way I do
About you now

And all the roads that lead you there were winding
And all the lights that light the way are blinding
There are many things that I would like to say to you
But I don't know how

I said maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
And after all
You're my wonderwall

I said maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
And after all
You're my wonderwall

I said maybe
You're going to be the one that saves me
You're going to be the one that saves me
You're going to be the one that saves me

Yeah.. that's not a rap.
This song is incredibly famous.
The lyrics I wrote aren't famous.

But thanks for comparing my lyrics to some of the most successful and well known lyrics of all time.
Dude you must really love my work. You want me to sort you out an autograph?
It's clear that you rap my words all day and then come come and jump onto your computer just to get another glimpse at this post.
Then you just cant resist to compliment me.

[The Personist]

I am a better writer than you. This is pretty much fact.

[The Indigo]

Here' another rap I wrote, describing the feelings I wish I could set free.

You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.

[crackedthesky]

LOL
you posted a whole video just for one of the words I used?

What'd you want him to do, post half the video?

[Idealist80]

I don't get the argument here, Everyone just be quiet and let this thread fade away.

[020jeffs]

What'd you want him to do, post half the video?

Or how about if he didn't make a huge deal out of the fact that I used the word megalomaniac?

[020jeffs]

Here' another rap I wrote, describing the feelings I wish I could set free.

You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.
You're a snake.

Could have at least made it 16 bars.

[020jeffs]

I am a better writer than you. This is pretty much fact.

HAHAHHAHA
you cunt.

Go write a thread that gets nearly as many positive responses.
Then you may stop sucking my dick.

[Idealist80]

Dude quit quoting people, no one want's to read this shit anymore, go write something better.

[circasuicide]

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[020jeffs]

Dude quit quoting people, no one want's to read this shit anymore, go write something better.

Don't wanna read it?
Don't read it.

[Matt Chylak]

you have like three positive responses in here, with no positive feedback. anything else is just your warped misconceptions of praise

[TheReckoner]

Why does every one keep telling me I didn't write this?
Some one obviously wrote it.
And that some one was me. This appears in NONE of Immortal Techniques songs
NONE of Twisters songs
and no other song that has EVER been professionally recorded. If you know of a song that uses these lyrics then please tell me, because it will make me a very rich man.

Until then, fuck off, and stop hating. I wrote these lyrics, EVERY SINGLE LINE is a product of my mind. and NO ONE elses.

lol just fucking google it.

[020jeffs]

you have like three positive responses in here, with no positive feedback. anything else is just your warped misconceptions of praise

There are nine positive comments on the first page.
Go to bed.

[The Personist]

Soulja Boy's lyrics > this guy's.

[blink44xx]

Soulja Boy's lyrics > this guy's.

false.

[The Personist]

Soulja Boy probably doesn't presume himself to be some kind of genius, though, so I stand by my distinction.

[020jeffs]

Soulja Boy probably doesn't presume himself to be some kind of genius, though, so I stand by my distinction.

Where have I presumed myself a genius?

Oh what... nowhere?

Thought so