Humunculus; I Give You This

[Idlewarrior]

Any comments/criticism very much appreciated! :)



Etchings of frustration
Lined the flesh like walls

Five had been here
Called to rise
Back of the mirror
Where one dead son lies
It wells, it gains
Momentum, as time
Ticks, ticks away

Tears dry as fourty six
Years of pain
Are all that's left to blame

He hasn't even a picture to frame

No name, no face
Ambilical disonance
Craddles like a cage

During the months of passing,
Dischords held high,
A bargain.
A plight.
Was made to be all
But... Denied.

The dialogue heavy with
Malice,
With confusion

"Mother, what illusion
What dreams you bring
To me in my
Sleeping slumber!
You mean to tell me,
That my days are numbered?

My brothers shall be numbered!
Not shamed!
They will claim
What I cannot
Take, for
Fathered fakes shall
Quake!
These fermented eggs
Are laced with my death
As credance for this breath"

A river and a flood
The moon and sun
Dilate with respect
Over the blood
Of a still born tongue

A river, and a gun...
A trigger, and a flood
To put god to shame
As he rots in his grave
I wait the next page
Since the clearing
Of the stage

[lfdfforever]

i like the flow of this. very original and everything is well placed.