I'm not a machine, I only run off your energy.

[DevinDomino]

Please let me know what you think.

(Verse)
I'm a master of disguise
To my mistress of suprise
Like how you move from east to west
Like the paintings eyes
Or the stares you give and
The stares you get
I'm always at the top and a left
Away from the stairs you take home

(Chorus)
I'm a sweaty fever
And two lips to taste
But you made me a believer
Of the moves you make

(Verse)
I'm a just a footnote
At the foot of your bed
A man overboard
In an unfaithful sea
Keep your unhappiness for the bed sheets
I walk a plank that leads out your bedroom
You see me walk the plank
You see me(*5)
But i'm just too gone

(Chorus)
I'm a sweaty fever
And two lips to taste
But you made me a believer
Of the moves you make
Oh darling work your fashion
Cause when I leave tonight
It'll be the last thing
You have going for you

(Bridge)
Just keep dates
For this fucked up keep sake
We drove all night as if
We couldn't see stop signs in these states
I'm just a master of diguise and a footnote
But you made me a believer

(Chorus)

[mjrebel]

i like the beat in my head but not all of your lines for some reasonj, i just dont know what it is.

[DevinDomino]

i like the beat in my head but not all of your lines for some reasonj, i just dont know what it is.

Well i'm glad you can get into it enough to get a beat in your head! And I totally understand about the lyrics. These are not my best lyrics at all. I tried a new writing process on this cause I had writiers block and it didn't turn out as I really hoped it would but it was difficult to write and a different experience for me so I decided to post it to see what others thought.

[mjrebel]

keep it up dude cause it can only get better! writer block sucks. i only seem to write when im at hard times with my girl

[DevinDomino]

keep it up dude cause it can only get better! writer block sucks. i only seem to write when im at hard times with my girl

thanks brutha haha

[BlackHeartBook]

all-in-all it was good tho it seems like you could do bettr as mentioned above haha

[DevinDomino]

all-in-all it was good tho it seems like you could do bettr as mentioned above haha
Thank you! Yeah fine saying this probably the worst of the best but like I said I tried a new thing and it didn't work out exactly the way I wanted but with some rework I can make this a lot better. The song is only like 3 days old and already I have a billion ideas for how I can change some things.

[Slip-kid]

hhhhhhmmmm yes yes yes