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OveriseFan
08/09/06, 10:30 AM
I might scrap that second verse. I don't know if I want a chorus. I love my ending but I don't want to spoil it in an unfinished song.

We watched the stars collide
With comets across subtle skies
It is times like this in which I
Truly feel alive
And the waves crashing down
Kept in time with our hearbeats
Oh the way that night makes
Summer feel complete

We both had trusted time
When I was singing you to sleep
Oh the way that love makes
Sleeping turn to dreams
But I knew deep inside
That this song just means goodbye
It is times like these when I curse
Distance and July
ArTkY_
08/09/06, 01:46 PM
A big :shake: to most of the second verse.

The first verse is fine... I'll think of some suggestions for a chorus later.
OveriseFan
08/09/06, 07:20 PM
A big :shake: to most of the second verse.

The first verse is fine... I'll think of some suggestions for a chorus later.
Yeah, I think you're right.
ArTkY_
08/09/06, 08:13 PM
Now read my songs!
a speedo model
08/09/06, 08:22 PM
i like the first verse alot, but yeah i wasn't too crazy about the second.
OveriseFan
08/10/06, 06:20 AM
i like the first verse alot, but yeah i wasn't too crazy about the second.

that's cause it's teh sux.
OveriseFan
08/10/06, 06:21 AM
Now read my songs!

I'm going to be honest, ever since February your "album year" songs have been going downhill to me. Though July is still pretty good. Your newest one kicks total ass though.
ArTkY_
08/10/06, 10:07 AM
I'm going to be honest, ever since February your "album year" songs have been going downhill to me. Though July is still pretty good. Your newest one kicks total ass though.
I agree about your album year statement. I've been very dissappointed in myself. July was a slight turnaround, IMO, though its still not up to par with Feb.
iHATEapril
08/10/06, 10:28 AM
The days were short in the warm night air
Admiring the effect of the moon in your hair
We lived recklessly, each day our last
Who knew we'd run out of those days so fast?
The stars played tricks with the tears in your eyes
You could never keep your composure when saying goodbye

Oh the things I do for you James.
OveriseFan
08/10/06, 10:30 AM
When Tariq told me you posted an AABBCC chorus, I was like "Oh man... this'll suck." But I actually love it.

I might just touch that up and use it. You jerk! I need to credit you on two songs now :(
iHATEapril
08/10/06, 10:31 AM
When Tariq told me you posted an AABBCC chorus, I was like "Oh man... this'll suck." But I actually love it.

I might just touch that up and use it. You jerk! I need to credit you on two songs now :(

Hahaha ; ) Tariq is so ontop of this forum.
ArTkY_
08/10/06, 10:31 AM
lawl, jamez iz ownt by myke.
ArTkY_
08/10/06, 10:32 AM
Hahaha ; ) Tariq is so ontop of this forum.
I was here before you all. I'm wearing the official lyrics forum jacket right now... that only I own. Birds come to me and tell me when something new is posted.
iHATEapril
08/10/06, 10:33 AM
I was here before you all. I'm wearing the official lyrics forum jacket right now... that only I own. Birds come to me and tell me when something new is posted.

Ahaha, James has to show me that other song he used my bridge in.
ArTkY_
08/10/06, 10:34 AM
Ahaha, James has to show me that other song he used my bridge in.
haha, I'll have to see. He says he changed it some.