I can't think up a title at the moment.

[OveriseFan]

I'll make it nice and pretty later in word and then you can download it if you want. Points to anyone who catches the musical reference and to whoever can catch every piece of wordplay, because believe me, I didn't even notice one until I typed it up. Sybolism like whoa in this one.

We danced like limbs and lighter lips, going up like smoke to cover both the sun and the moon (at the same time.) And upon broken trees we sang our drunken hymns sober, because we didn't mean a word of it.

I love you.
I loved you.

We dug for treasure under the eyes of two lovers on the beach near a convent (which stole their souls?) And upon broken fences the birds sang our wedding song sober, because we didn't mean a word of it.

I love her.
I loved her.

We sat in solemn silence in an empty room and smiled whiled we watched it burn and break. And as we sang hallelu, we laughed to ourselves as gold angels appeared, because we didn't mean a word of it.

He loved her.

I have her.

I need her.

You want her.

Who are you
To tell me
What I need?

I am just
Someone who
Tried to help.

The melody lost itself,
Somewhere in between,
The music and the misery.

[TheObserver]

This is some good stuff. I like it

[ArTkY_]

Not bad at all from reading it once.

Going with what you told me on AIM its excellent.

[lfdfforever]

you are the best love songwriter

[OveriseFan]

Yeah but I need to re-write this.

I don't want a 'love song' per say and you aren't the first to say that haha.

[a speedo model]

i like it alot, good job.

[EmoPunkerGirl]

i think it's awesome

[goyoyofosoco]

I like this.




It made me think of "Slow Down" by The Academy Is, for some odd reason.

[myaimistruex3]

I like this.




It made me think of "Slow Down" by The Academy Is, for some odd reason.


the "but we didn't mean a word of it" made me think of that song too.
i like it too.

[RiotChick]

cool