Gally Is Love

[lfdfforever]

hello beautiful bride
has your focus faded out
do you need the hope of a honest heart
the odds end
but soon great things will start
i know this is true
it's profound and willingful
nothing can stop our go
even if we don't know
the fingers spark and a feeling ignites
"i can truly say, i haven't felt this way in a long time"
the future grows and ages just fine
again and again
the cups falls and life spills out into our hands
do we sit aside or take the good and bad
with the love they say we'll never have
"i think if we hold onto the world, the world might just hang on to us"

the fuss is misleading and we our safe inside
we are two but i honestly i see just one

[a speedo model]

i kind of like this one, man. the flow is better then most of your others. but i don't know, there seemed to be too much filler. i like the last two lines though. keep it up, man.

[lfdfforever]

i kind of like this one, man. the flow is better then most of your others. but i don't know, there seemed to be too much filler. i like the last two lines though. keep it up, man. ok got ya

[wyverna]

Yeah, I like the last two lines as well. The rest of it seems a bit forced, as though you're trying a bit too hard.

[lfdfforever]

Yeah, I like the last two lines as well. The rest of it seems a bit forced, as though you're trying a bit too hard.i never try hard, but if it seems like that, then i did something wrong

[ArTkY_]

I don't think its very good, not your best, sorry.

The ending is good as usual, but an ending can't redeem an entire piece.

[lfdfforever]

I don't think its very good, not your best, sorry.

The ending is good as usual, but an ending can't redeem an entire piece. thanks for being honest