I named this song after Drew Beringer for free promotion.

[OveriseFan]

Yeah, I love this title. It needs a bridge, but I might just solo. I need a good solo.

With her breath on your neck
And the love in your sweat
You've been waiting for this
But it hurts more than you
Would ever know
It's not just the fact that
You don't know her name
Cause you've been waiting for this
But she's louder than you
Thought she would be.

And you are scared,
Because you know
That morning brings...

An empty bed
And empty room
And that empty
Feeling in you
You can debate
Half empty or
Half full but
This glass is on the floor...

Waiting in the dark
How the hell did I get here?
It was only a kiss
But it hurt more than you
Would ever know.
It's too hard to explain
What she did to you
Cause you thought you wanted this
But you were just drawn in
By her siren song...

And you are scared,
Because you know
That morning brings...

An empty bed
And empty room
And that empty
Feeling in you
You can debate
Half empty or
Half full but
This glass is on the floor...

[EmoPunkerGirl]

hmmm very..... creative?
i like it!!

[CT-Tim]

Seems to be the same idea and approach as Brand New - Sic Transit Gloria... only Jessie is magnificently great at lyrics on that album (honestly, I have no idea how he got so much better from the first one but he did).

I'd suggest taking a different approach to the theme or work in some unique spin. Right now it doesn't hold much on its own.

[a speedo model]

i don't know about this one, not my favorite of yours, James. nothing really jumped out at me.

but i do love the title.

[OveriseFan]

Seems to be the same idea and approach as Brand New - Sic Transit Gloria... only Jessie is magnificently great at lyrics on that album (honestly, I have no idea how he got so much better from the first one but he did).

I'd suggest taking a different approach to the theme or work in some unique spin. Right now it doesn't hold much on its own.

Jesse*

And yes, that was the same idea...

But his lyrics aren't the best part, it's his melodies to his lyrics. ;)

[wyverna]

Wait, I'm sure I posted a comment on this. Maybe I just forgot to press the 'post quick reply' button or something.

Anywayz, because I love you I'll write it out all over again.

First of all, the line "it was only a kiss" totally reminds me too much of The Killers. And also put that song in my head. Parts of this also seem a bit disjointed to me. Much like my sentences are turning out to be, but whatever. Anyway, I love the title but I'm not really much of a fan of this one. Sorry.

[vandalsandquinn]

haha i liked this

[ArTkY_]

Reviewer Tilt: 100%
Overall Score: 100%

hahahaha

[OveriseFan]

Reviewer Tilt: 100%
Overall Score: 100%

hahahaha

EL MAYO!

(Shove it up your ass, Rawlings!)