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lfdfforever
09/08/06, 09:14 PM
six side up with the dice rolling around
we're like mice running on our kitchen's ground

so certain but oh so mistaken
lead me away into a say of thoughts
like a stream of letters ready to spell a word
but still it's something i've never heard

the popular fix has a low end tool
it works under its full potential
we tape our eyeids shut
just for the scared child in us

hes view is sticked to the garden outside
where the bees fly to their hives
passing the beauty of each daffodill
and chanting away, meditation in the most fulfilling way

race for something beyond my hand's reach
i can't help you anymore...........................

HereUntilDeath
09/08/06, 09:59 PM
I love it. Keep it up!!!

lfdfforever
09/08/06, 10:09 PM
I love it. Keep it up!!! thanks sooooooooo much

HereUntilDeath
09/08/06, 10:20 PM
I think this is my favorite that you've posted.....I think....

lfdfforever
09/09/06, 08:52 AM
I think this is my favorite that you've posted.....I think....
sweet

wyverna
09/09/06, 12:33 PM
i really like this, but -- and i know this is silly -- but i prefer it when, if you have full stops continued, you limit yourself to just three. i know that sounds crazy, but i personally just think it looks better. your writing was great, though, good work.

a speedo model
09/09/06, 03:45 PM
i like it alot. great work.

lfdfforever
09/09/06, 04:06 PM
i really like this, but -- and i know this is silly -- but i prefer it when, if you have full stops continued, you limit yourself to just three. i know that sounds crazy, but i personally just think it looks better. your writing was great, though, good work. ok i'll keep that in mind and thanks for enjoying it

lfdfforever
09/09/06, 04:06 PM
i like it alot. great work. thanks a lot dude