my toes are bleeding

[Ilovepoprock]

I find it odd
That the angles meet
To make a heart shaped sign
but so many times
the clock rewinds
and leaves us back where we started
So it came to me then
that i have no friends
Just an abundance of my dearest aquaintances
And it struck me so hard
that all i thought
was meaningless, with no true existance

So i seem to have had an epiphany
about nothing and how it is not
my toes are bleeding
as im dragging along
held down by the memory
i wish i had forgot
I held on so hard
as it was all lost, for not
and your pushing on the hour hand of the clock

So tell me, reality
where do you stand
the harder you fight it all
the farther you sink in the sand
so give me an explanation
give me some time, let me know
at least, why your choosing to rewind

[a speedo model]

i like this alot.

[coatbutton]

I like this too. Do you have any ideas for music yet?

[HereUntilDeath]

I like this a lott also....
It reminds me of Alice In Wonderland

[Ilovepoprock]

I like this a lott also....
It reminds me of Alice In Wonderland

why's that?

[parallelism]

Nice, I liked this.

[Narcissm]

i really like this. but i dont have a favourite line....i dont know whether its becasue its all good or nothing stands out.
anyways well done.x

[masebabi]

i like the "so tell me reality..." part alot

[Ilovepoprock]

thank you all, i apreciatte it. any feed back? constructive critscisim?

[HereUntilDeath]

why's that?

That the angles meet
To make a heart shaped sign
but so many times
the clock rewinds
and leaves us back where we started
So it came to me then
that i have no friends
Just an abundance of my dearest aquaintances
And it struck me so hard
that all i thought
was meaningless, with no true existance

I am not sure. When I read it Alice In Wonderland just popped in my head. I think because these lines like "To make a heart shaped sign" that reminds me of the queen of hearts and "the clock rewinds and leaves us back were we started So it came to me that I have no friends just a abundance of aquaintances."
Reminds me of Alice bieng lonely and not really having any friends just aquaintances.....
But I dunno....it was weird to me too. But great job.