Cry....

[punklife]

I cried last night bacause of you,
After what we did I know we're through,
And time will pass like it always does,

I miss our time together,
with love that we thought brought us together,
All of that jus made our love weather,
We cannot cry just because,
the love we had has all been crushed,

We listen to people everyday,
people who hurt just this way,
We remember the times we had together,
so we sit and cry,
It makes everything "BETTER"...

[wyverna]

It's a little cliche. Try and write about something more original.

[TalentShow88']

it has a childish "cute" sound to it. Maybe if you reflect on exactly what you went through someone else could relate. its generic. hope you write more

[lostfear]

a little cliche? it's completely cliche. nothing is original.

it is cute. because's everyones felt that way at some time or another.

but yeah. keep working at it.