A Place For Poems....

[angie710]

I hadent noticed any threads to post poems, Hope you guys dont mind...I love to write, and I'd like to share...Please post your poems and/or lyrics here, and be constructive in your critisism..... Hope u enjoy, and I cant wait to read from all of you...
This I wrote about 4 years ago....Its Untitled....

The blackest of nights spent with images of you
pretending to lie to what I know to be true
Contridicting matters never really mattered much at all
I hope you have the faith to know i'll be underneath you when you fall
When the eternity ends tommorow and forever lasts a day
I'll take that time to swallow my pride and finally say
If finding you means loosing myself,
That's a price i'm willing to pay
The fork in the road has forced my desision
I just hope this is the right way

[angie710]

Oh, Im sorry...I didnt know.....


Thanks for the compliment, it means alot....

I suppose I'll leave it here, and await the verbal lashings for posting it in General Discussion... Ha Ha

[devin]

Originally posted by angie710
I hadent noticed any threads to post poems, Hope you guys dont mind...I love to write, and I'd like to share...Please post your poems and/or lyrics here, and be constructive in your critisism..... Hope u enjoy, and I cant wait to read from all of you...
This I wrote about 4 years ago....Its Untitled....

The blackest of nights spent with images of you
pretending to lie to what I know to be true
Contridicting matters never really mattered much at all
I hope you have the faith to know i'll be underneath you when you fall
When the eternity ends tommorow and forever lasts a day
I'll take that time to swallow my pride and finally say
If finding you means loosing myself,
That's a price i'm willing to pay
The fork in the road has forced my desision
I just hope this is the right way

You'll get no verbal lashings from me dear. It was far more intelligible than the lyrics we are subjected to on a regular basis. I like the wordplay. It's very lyrical. It's good.

[angie710]

:D Thank you sweetie...Its very simple compared to most of my other writings, but thats why I like it, because it was written in purity, not worrying about it being complex and/or deep....


I guess no one else wants to add any of their writings???

[angie710]

:( That seemed to be very personal....I was able to apply it to many of my life situations...Thank you for sharing, Its beautiful...and you have my deepest sympathies....if it applies...

[theused_FSF]

wow, both of those are great poems, i am amazed that there is actually some talent on this board

[tmlfan]

i will post one of myne when i find one

[angie710]

Originally posted by theused_FSF
wow, both of those are great poems, i am amazed that there is actually some talent on this board


Thank you sweetie!!! You have anything you wanna write? Feel free, and contribute!!!

[evil zach]

both of those were really good. I might get some stuff up some day, but I don;t have anything I'm really happy with at the moment.

[angie710]

Just write something now...See what comes out, Zach....

[evil zach]

lets see....

there once was a man from nantucket
who loved his horse so much he would....nah....let me start again.

ahem
...I got nothing. I'll get some stuff up soon though.

[angie710]

Why do you think Its okay to leave
Stand there and pretend you really believe
The things you said when you woke me that night
A slur in your speech, starting a fight
Those things we share can only be true
If you understand what I mean to you


See...its easy...just let it flow...That was corny and short, but to the point...Try again Zach...Im serious...

[ms y o o n]

im bad with poems
so i wont read them or write them
if its long i'll be like.. meh its good! haha im a loser

[angie710]

Ummmm, ok....At least you're honest...

[ms y o o n]

no im just bad
if i were to read a REALLY bad one, i would still think its good
iand i cannot write at all

[evil zach]

Originally posted by angie710
Why do you think Its okay to leave
Stand there and pretend you really believe
The things you said when you woke me that night
A slur in your speech, starting a fight
Those things we share can only be true
If you understand what I mean to you


See...its easy...just let it flow...That was corny and short, but to the point...Try again Zach...Im serious...
I dunno, I have a pretty wierd aproch to writing...They usaly start of as long ramblings several pages in length, then it takes me a few days to shorten and make it flow...but here we go...

7000 dead, and for what?
A few cents off at the pumps
You can tell me till your blue in the face
It was for freedom
For juctice
For liberty
Yet when I see the people silenced by their liberators
I can't help but wonder
They hate it when you wonder....
....too hard to control....
They killed in the name of liberty
Freedom of speach
But I hear no voices coming from the mounds of flesh in the desert
However I do see the rich profiting
I can hear them giggling
Like an maniac after the kill
There they are
Rubbing their hands togeather
Licking their lips
Lauging with delight
Its just a game to them




That probaly went a bit longer then it should have, or not long enough...or something....any way, its definetly not my best work.

[ms y o o n]

heh guess what im going to say about it??
its good!! no but i really did read it, and i like it

[evil zach]

thanks

[angie710]

See Zach, that was great!!! It was powerful..Came from inside... :: claps ::

Give me something romantic now....Can you?

[devin]

I prefer to write in prose, but I think I may give this a shot. Or just dredge up some older ones I may find.

[angie710]

I'd love to hear something....Hey...U can email me at AK1_LV@YAHOO.COM... if u want...I have no computer at home, so I wont be able to check until Monday, but I'd like it if you did.....

[wild_goose]

i write poems all the time. often they turn into songs for my band and stuff like that.
i might as well contribute.. i posted this in the "poetry" section but nobody really goes in there, so.. yeah. here ya go

you don't have to think too hard about it
i'm confused enough for the world
the poems spin down into a pit
with spider webs tangled in words
between every word is an infinite space
among which photographs search for a place
to belong is to be wrong but being wrong isn't right
images of myself gone, too blurry in daylight
a picture can say a thousand words i suppose
in this case a twisted moment was froze
between my mind and a hard place that was made
i pried it out with a dull rusty blade
cause and effect can be a real funny thing
especially when we don't know half of what we drink
the poison of trying too hard to be clever
the hole of the bullet that wanted to be better
tried more than the others it won
no credit given to the gun
this might be what the future holds
this could be or so we've been told
but as far as i know yesterday
is as near as the future can be

[evil zach]

Originally posted by angie710
See Zach, that was great!!! It was powerful..Came from inside... :: claps ::

Give me something romantic now....Can you?
Sorry. i'm not nearly pissed of enough to do that.

[blaarg]

i don't trust people not to steal my lyrics.

[richter915]

dude, zach, your poem about the war is so true. it kicked ass, not only was it nice sounding, but completely factual...at least you're not naive like the rest of this country...good job.

[evil zach]

thanks

[angie710]

Zach, you have to be pissed to write something romantic? Interesting....Devin, Im still waiting sweet cheeks...:D