opinions please

[punkrocprincess]

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I'm screaming at the top of my lungs
I cannot propel my voice any further
I don't want this
I can't take this
If there's anymore of this please get it away from me
Just want to be liked
Just want to be someone
Don't leave me alone
Don't leave when I say to go
To go
To go -

(Chours)
Don't leave me
Stand by me
Just hold me and keep me company
Don't want to
Be without you
Without you to stand by me

Just want to be loved
Just want to have something like they do
Just want to
Just want to
Just want to have somebody like you -

Chours

Please don't go
I don't know if I could stay together
While you were gone
Until you came back so -

Chours

I need you
You need me
Stay together and we'll never say, "I'm sorry"
Don't feel bad
Because I'm here
I won't feel alone
Because you're near

Chours

You are what keeps me going so -
Please will you
Please will you
Please will you stand by me



Sounds a little repetitive, I know, but what do you all think?

[badreligionist]

its a tad bit repetitive but hey you always get a really good hook if it has repetition. this song portrays to me that you felt frustrated when writing cause when your frustrated you tend to say a thing many times over to try to get it across to people...but anyways, its not bad.

[punkrocprincess]

Originally posted by badreligionist
its a tad bit repetitive but hey you always get a really good hook if it has repetition. this song portrays to me that you felt frustrated when writing cause when your frustrated you tend to say a thing many times over to try to get it across to people...but anyways, its not bad.

yeah, i actually was very frustrated when i wrote it. thanks for the feedback. : )