A song of mine.Opinions needed.This my first time doing this.Please, No let downs.

[LeavingThisScen]

I am petrified of what you hold inside
Waiting and ticking for it all takes time
Runaway to black and white
Stay away from the lonesome nights
Waiting for a will to fight
Knowing your wrong but saying your right
Tricking kids who come for treats
Tripping those who walk on feet
Waterbased while oil spread
Letting the mess get to your head
Worthy respect down on your knees
Simple words like thanks and please
You hurt your hand so you break your leg
The pain all ends with these morphine meds
Not afraid to go backwards
Not tempted with what comes forward
Lift up what you cannot hold
Capture truth with what your told
Black top sidewalks let them melt
Never think about what you felt
When you hug the fireworks spark
When you kiss they embark
Your motion is for he who cries
Your words will never fall from lies
The beach will never close
Thats why you always go
Late night visits by yourself
Watch the water sway and melt

[decisionpending]

its seems really cool but its more poetry than it is lyrics

[MusicMends]

Ya its more poetry

[MusicMends]

But it is good

[Alex Djaferis]

poetry is the same man. maybe hes got a tune in his head for it.

[Mr.Melody]

the guy's got some good rhymes in there, although it sounds pretty much like a drawn out verse; he should've split it up into a first and second, add a chorus and bridge and the song is formed. As it stands, it has obvious potential but no formation