Young Hearts in Motion

[mz_isabella]

Verse 1

Minds racing, hearts beating
Couldn't resist each other's touch
Eyes meeting, barely speaking
Didn't think they'd love each other so much
Now they're dancing and romancing
She could feel herself getting weak
She's so infatuated with him
and the way he speaks

Verse 2

Now, they're all alone on the telephone
He's whispering sweet nothings in her ear
If it really shows, she probably knows
that is something that she wants to hear
Only thing on his mind is sweet devine
Every night, he writes sweet love letters
He says, "Maybe we can only see
that we'll always be together"

Chorus

And we're all seeing...
Young hearts, young hearts in motion
Young hearts, young hearts in motion, ohhh

(c)02 November 06, Catrina Charlene aka Mz. Isabellahttp://www.xanga.com/images/heart2.gif

[RomeoAGoGo]

The whole thing is predictable and cliche. The rhyming scheme is childish and amateur. This is a trainwreck.

[matt_rawlings]

Not my bag

[black rose]

my eyes.
ow.

[black rose]

okay now that i read it through,
i agree romeo.
it's unbelievably cliche and cute.
a lot of times that's a good thing, but the whole thing is so mushy.
bleh.
not my cup of tea.

the rhyming is extremely forced sounding.
but keep writing.
practice makes perfect.
or really good anyways.