PDA

View Full Version : Seductive Liars


XxLoVeLy4UxX
11/05/06, 02:55 PM
The road too long for either of us to walk
The phone to hard for us to talk
I am sick of hearing the lies
I am sick of hearing the deadly sighs
Are you ready for the sight you'll see?
Are you ready, this time, for the real me?
It's hard to have waited this long to tell you
For I know you have a secret too
we have both held in our hearts for far to long
The only reason we loved was based on this flaw
So will you stand up tall and go first
The secrets out, run and hide
Hurry up and go inside.
Before the darkness takes you with it
There's no hiding the liar inside of you
There's no hiding the compassion of what we do.
For the secret is that I have always loved you
Cover your ears, I know you want to.
Shut you eyes and picture me not here
All you have to do, is say 'good bye'
And I'm gone forever not coming back for more
I'm sorry for now both hearts are torn
I guess that's the end, the pitiful finale
The picture show is done, we've had the final run
So good night little heart see you next time
I thought his heart was mine, guess again.
For all we went through was pure pain.
Good night and good-bye.

punkpixie
11/05/06, 03:21 PM
Its riddled with cliche like a sieve is riddled with holes.

I hate to say I hated it.

a speedo model
11/05/06, 04:25 PM
Yeah, this is very cliche and was not able to hold my interest.

black rose
11/05/06, 05:29 PM
it's wasn't really holding my interest at any part.
the beginning was okay but it never really got better.

it was kind of all over the place too.
sorry.
but keep writing.
you have potential.

XxLoVeLy4UxX
11/08/06, 04:33 PM
erm...thanks?