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lfdfforever
11/07/06, 08:22 PM
was this a wish silently dismissed from your head
spread around to fit the open space of sheets on your bed
where we lay in the worst state of mind
spending our time for a cheering boredom
that we can't seem to find a way through

it's all put on you
you know what to do

i built this city for you
where the people love to see your face
they know it's a safe place
because the sky is smiling down
and the clouds share wealth in their white suits
i made this home for you

we know what to do
but it will always be put in you

i'm leaving with or without you
i'm sad to say this is the only fact i wish was fiction
it came so fast and for a short amount of time i thought it would always last
but the maker made us weak
that's still not a excuse to file a divorced from the home you loved
it's a part of your life you need inside
to breath
to strive
to keep yourself alive

a speedo model
11/07/06, 09:29 PM
This is fucking great. Great job on this one. All your recent ones have been excellent man. Keep it up.

Alex Djaferis
11/08/06, 03:42 AM
i like it too. good job.

IAmHolocaust
11/08/06, 08:42 AM
This is really good, I really like the ending verse. Great job!

wyverna
11/08/06, 09:53 AM
Ooh, I really like this. Good work!

lfdfforever
11/08/06, 12:17 PM
This is fucking great. Great job on this one. All your recent ones have been excellent man. Keep it up. thanks

lfdfforever
11/08/06, 12:17 PM
i like it too. good job. awesome

lfdfforever
11/08/06, 12:18 PM
This is really good, I really like the ending verse. Great job! that last verse is my favorite, thanks for enjoying

lfdfforever
11/08/06, 12:18 PM
Ooh, I really like this. Good work! thank you very much

lfdfforever
11/08/06, 06:26 PM
yeah baby

de la sympathie
11/09/06, 07:08 PM
You just keep getting better! I really liked this. The end seemed a bit rushed, but it was really good.

lfdfforever
11/09/06, 08:19 PM
You just keep getting better! I really liked this. The end seemed a bit rushed, but it was really good. thanks a lot