heartbreak with cyanide

[furynine]

---Heartbreak with Cyanide---
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Watching as it happens again
Once more for my angry book of memories

Starting off in a good sort of way,
Time goes by, it's inevitable,
My heart and soul decend back into despair

You gazed at me with compassion
Your word will always ring in my ears.
You told me you loved me, and
Nothing could bring that to an end.

Now some time has passed my dear,
Your words are just an echo, and
Your gaze has turned astray

We were meant to be, but now I see,
That you never even wanted me at all.

Poison would be better, than what has come to be.
A gunshot would be better, that not being with you.
Poison would be better, could be better
A gunshot would be better,
A quick death would be better
Than a heartbreak left by you.

[DriveTBSthru]

sounds like tbs lyrics.

[BuriedAlive]

with a static lullaby type of title he/she really shows their influences

[cortney]

like your lyrics.

very nice, the title is very kool aswell.

[lifelesslove]

it's not bad, it just seems to not stretch a very large level of vocab. if you don't want that, then i see finch in your writing, but until hearing it over backgrounds, it really doesn't do much for me, and the outro is a little forced, i think you could write much better than that, hopefully this is just the start, cause you could be reallly good at writing.

[furynine]

lol, i'll admit, the title was influenced by static lullaby, and the lyrics were inspired by Taking Back SUnday. and the lyrics are written the way they are because they arent edited. i just typed them up the way they were originally wirtten, how i was feeling at the time. but thanks for the compliment that i could be a great writer

[DriveTBSthru]

good job.,