tell me this is shit so i'll stop writing...

[stikfiguremedic]

Consumed by the past.
Can’t let it go
Changed and challenged by the things I can’t control
Amazed at how life played out
Lost so far back, the present doesn’t feel real
When did I lose control of myself (was it when I lost you???)
Truth be told I care more than I don’t
This façade only hides the real me from the world
I’ve been wearing this mask so long I’ve forgotten what I look like
Images of my life burned into memory now slowly fade to black
When did I die?
Below solemn words etched in the marble
“1985-NOW”
Was it all a waste of time a waste of breath?
Taken prisoner by my mind I keep forgetting the difference between truth and lies…
1-love

[lfdfforever]

It's not that bad but it's also not very good.

[punkpixie]

hahaha

what was the 1 love thing at the end all about? It made me laugh, but I'm thinking that it shouldnt have.

[Alex Djaferis]

hahaha

what was the 1 love thing at the end all about? It made me laugh, but I'm thinking that it shouldnt have.

beat me to it :) thought the exact same thing

[Ilovepoprock]

try throughing in some stanzas, so the phrasing is more clear.

[stikfiguremedic]

1 love = holding love above all other emotions on a world wide and culturally sensitive basis. To include but not limited to; love for your fellow man, love for butterflies, rainbows, ugly animals and cute animals, love for your enemies, your friends and your family. *(I know its corny and dumb but I like the idea of a society focused on love, 1 love) In reality thou love is as indefinable as this term is. I encourage the prolific use of this term.

[roggie1590]

i know it sounds weird, but i think you thought about it too much when you wrote this

but yes, i agree, stanzas would be wonderful


p.s. my dad was a medic =]