little thing

[XxLoVeLy4UxX]

Words spiraling out of control.
The weight that has been lifted of my soul.
Its time to think about the past,
even though we know it won't last.
Try to put the pieces together.
I guess now it is for the better.
The healing process is a long one.
It's just like the rise of the sun.
Take it one moment at a time.
I chose your life over mine.

[XxLoVeLy4UxX]

is that better?

[black rose]

liked the last two lines.
but the rhyming seems forced.
keep trying.

[ArTkY_]

disliked all lines.
rhyming seems forced.
stop trying.
Fixed.

[OveriseFan]

Oh Tariq...

ilu.

But seriously... yeah.

Oh yeah, and Tariq is only doing this to please me while I'm here again. Keep writing, just don't post until it's something you enjoy yourself.

[ArTkY_]

Oh Tariq...

ilu.

But seriously... yeah.

Oh yeah, and Tariq is only doing this to please me while I'm here again. Keep writing, just don't post until it's something you enjoy yourself.
haahahaha

I used to only do this. No critiques whatsoever... I would either say "this sucks" or "this is good."

[OveriseFan]

haahahaha

I used to only do this. No critiques whatsoever... I would either say "this sucks" or "this is good."

Then we turned over a new leaf and tried to revive the forum...