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decisionpending
06/27/03, 08:16 PM
i posted this earlier with no comments... please comment!!!

'a few seconds of silence'

did you see me
falling to the ground
engulfed in flames?
did you hear me
calling out to you
screaming out your name?
did you help me
spilling out my feelings
whilst drowning my sorrow?
did you know that
i ain't long for this world
'cause my time is borrowed?

can you help me now
out of this lonesome town
out of this stupid routine now
can you save me now
from this lonesome town
from this hurtful regime now

i need some
salvation
city lights keep burning my eyes
i know now
explanations
this city will be my demise
black light
white dark
i just wanted to find my mark
cant sleep
too tired
what is this affliction i've aquired?

can you help me now
out of this lonesome town
out of this stupid routine now
can you save me now
from this lonesome town
from this hurtful regime now

NOW!!!

sunset
sunrise
i cant even open my eyes
cant drink
cant eat
i cant even find my feet

did you see me
falling to the ground
engulfed in flames?
did you hear me
calling out to you
screaming out your name?
screaming out your name
screaming...
UTi
06/28/03, 04:45 AM
not too great
LostInApril
06/30/03, 10:14 AM
sounds like it could have a cool beat to it, some lyrics just dont seem to mesh well together, but overall good
hopeshavefallen
07/03/03, 06:39 AM
It's ok I don't like the overall rhythm
lifelesslove
07/05/03, 05:53 PM
i think it's the best piece i've read overall in this chat. it shows how a love that you can't hold can affect the way you think, how it can affect everything, make it seem faster, break slower, and last longer than you want it to. i love it, check out my stuff, let me see what you think
BuriedAlive
07/07/03, 09:24 PM
pretty good
Zack Attack
07/09/03, 05:52 PM
i liked it, i like songs with meaning, and that one seemed to be meaningful. cool song.
Rufio217
07/09/03, 08:27 PM
Originally posted by hopeshavefallen
It's ok I don't like the overall rhythm


What the fuck, you don't even know what his rhythm to the song was, what you meant is you don't like "your" overall rhythm that you implimented to the song...He could have a killer beat that makes the song kick ass, but what you were singing in your head was different
BuriedAlive
07/09/03, 09:25 PM
What the fuck, you don't even know what his rhythm to the song was, what you meant is you don't like "your" overall rhythm that you implimented to the song...He could have a killer beat that makes the song kick ass, but what you were singing in your head was different


rufio217, couldnt have said it better myself