something i wrote when I was depressed not much but what do you think?

[colormecliche]

it started out as a suicide attempt
turned into a little pain to make the feelings go away
im wondering if ill get the courage one day
the lie to myself is that i actually want to die

the feelings rush back
it doesn't matter im still detached
my addiction is pain
it gets me through my days
when nothing ever comes easy

[black rose]

eh this isn't really that good.
i'm sorry.
the whole, suicide, pain thing is kind of overdone.
keep writing though.

p.s. your username is amazing.
i'm jealous.
i hate mine.

[OveriseFan]

eh this isn't really that good.
i'm sorry.
the whole, suicide, pain thing is kind of overdone.
keep writing though.

p.s. your username is amazing.
i'm jealous.
i hate mine.

Actually, his username is like... the most cliche line I've ever heard. I am sad to say I've used it myself (although, cleverly, and it was more a variation on it, where I made cliches impressive.)

So yeah.

But my username is easily the worst.

I mean, yeah, promoting bands is good and all, but as your username? No.

P.S. This piece is 1000000 times worse than your username.

Pretty bad.

[a speedo model]

Yeah, I don't like this one at all.

[colormecliche]

yeah i got colormecliche off of a limewire song name mistype. I thought it sounded cool. Ive used it on alot of stuff. As for the writing I dont know what got into me to write it except I was going through some rough stuff in my life at that time.

[black rose]

Actually, his username is like... the most cliche line I've ever heard. I am sad to say I've used it myself (although, cleverly, and it was more a variation on it, where I made cliches impressive.)

So yeah.

But my username is easily the worst.

I mean, yeah, promoting bands is good and all, but as your username? No.

P.S. This piece is 1000000 times worse than your username.

Pretty bad.well it sounds cool.
wow either
1. my username doesn't suck as bad as i thought it did.
no wait, it still sucks
OR
2. this peice really does suck.
which it kinda does but she'll improve.
give it some time.

[xxpaigiexx]

It could do with some touching okay I'm going to be brutal ALOT of touching up everyone talks about pain but there never seems to actually be a reason for the pain try writing about something going on in the world today, something going on in your life, it could be anything, just no to the pain. Suicide is an over used subject. I usually write about everything going on around me. I write down exactly what is making me angry why it is. Not just pain as a general topic. Hopefully see you get it right soon.

[Alex Djaferis]

didnt like that

[OveriseFan]

It could do with some touching okay I'm going to be brutal ALOT of touching up everyone talks about pain but there never seems to actually be a reason for the pain try writing about something going on in the world today, something going on in your life, it could be anything, just no to the pain. Suicide is an over used subject. I usually write about everything going on around me. I write down exactly what is making me angry why it is. Not just pain as a general topic. Hopefully see you get it right soon.

So...

Not 'touching up' at all...

Just scrapping this and starting new.