wrote this last night as a storm was rolling in...

[myownjourney]

this basically just reflects a year of heartbreak in a long distance relationship...please tell me what you think...

Pacific winds carrying my cries on a cool summer night
As my voice fades to a whisper
Will there be any words left by the time that it reaches you
If you cant here me now you never will
Forsaken nights I spend alone
Come back to me, come back to this life

Terminate this fight, struggling against everything we know is right
Autumn leaves fall along with my hopes
As you make a life with out me
I see it happening right in front of me
Our love is turning cold
Now with the bitter winter air my heart freezes
Life with out love
Days become mundane with monotonous tasks
Just waste my time thinking of what could have been
Wait for spring to come maybe I will love again.

[black rose]

this basically just reflects a year of heartbreak in a long distance relationship...please tell me what you think...

Pacific winds carrying my cries on a cool summer night
As my voice fades to a whisper
Will there be any words left by the time that it reaches you
If you cant here me now you never will
Forsaken nights I spend alone
Come back to me, come back to this life

Terminate this fight, struggling against everything we know is right
Autumn leaves fall along with my hopes
As you make a life with out me
I see it happening right in front of me
Our love is turning cold
Now with the bitter winter air my heart freezes
Life with out love
Days become mundane with monotonous tasks
Just waste my time thinking of what could have been
Wait for spring to come maybe I will love again.
i loved the bolded parts, although the last one is sort of cliche, i liked it.
overall good, but could be better.
keep writing!

[a speedo model]

This is alright, but too full of cliches. You have some good lines and ideas they're just not well thought out. But keep writing, you'll improve.