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earlynovemberX
06/30/03, 06:28 PM
she lives a life of lies she lives
a life thats like a sinking ship.
alone, and lost at sea.

the storms they leave no trace of hope
yet seemingly she stays afloat
she can't bear, the weight, of the ocean.

she sends out notes in bottles wrote
in hopes to find a way to go
but noone really cares, noone really cares.

chorus:
Can you hear me singing?
the words crawl around in my throat.

the echo proves, we are all just truly alone.
and the silence, seems to speak for it self.

and all i want is
to die warm in my bed.
alone, and drawn out for the storm

my voice comes to you
like radio waves as they crash on the shores of your ears
and the forecast, suddenly seems clear.

gripping onto the coast,
as the sea, slowly drags them away to the sound
and the sound of the night

chorus.x2

still needs a brigde...

DriveTBSthru
07/03/03, 04:24 AM
its interseting sounding, but cool its like about a girl with a storm thats fun sounding hah..

hopeshavefallen
07/03/03, 06:45 AM
The rhyming throws my attention from the song.


Sounds like you are writing the words to the music when you should be writing them seperatly.

DriveTBSthru
07/03/03, 07:27 AM
why do you care so much