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ohreak gurl 08
07/01/03, 07:14 PM
listening .... numb from the inside out, words register throughout my mind, i've lost all my senses and i'm feeling blind, i can't feel or be felt, too many cards have already been shuffled and dealt, do you know what it feels like when you want to scream but no ones around and it's pointless cuz you wouldn't be seen? you ask me what's wrong and i'd be reluctant to find a reply, but for me i'd be lucky if even i knew why. yeah that would be nice, for me to be able to know the reason, but they come and go as simple as the season. it's so confusing and i'm afraid you'd never understand. but that's ok because my lifes been packed in a can, labeled worthless, and passed down by hand. it's horrible to say and horrible to think, but i'm thinking about death and it's closer than you would think. it's sounding quite good now if ya know what i mean. god i'm so confused i wanna just wipe my slate clean. but it'll never happen because people insist on me sharing, i wish people would just be un normal for once, and just stop caring.

boxcar racer
07/02/03, 03:49 AM
i dont care if it makes you feel any better;-)...

punk_rock_poet
07/02/03, 03:39 PM
u shouldve turned it into a poem instead of ur random thoughts. its good but its just something that someone would say-no meaning of a hint to be a poem. try harder and stop selling ur self short

decisionpending
07/03/03, 01:57 PM
shit, they'd be some killer lyrics if they got some formation around it, it good now but it be fantastic!!!

decisionpending
07/03/03, 01:59 PM
and i can't speak good so never mind my lack grammar