scared, beaten, bleed, cryed

[funkypunkrocker]

Here i am all alone
Standing on this rooftop
should i jump
Should i stay
Live in this messed up world
Would anyone even notice
Just another little depressed kid
Every day is just another day in a thousand years
So here i am
Pouring my heart out to you
I've been scared
I've been beaten
I've bleed and
I've cryed
And look where I've got
Im just stand on this rooftop

[black rose]

well it was kind of cliche.
every one is writing about rooftops these days.
i'm sorry.
but keep writing,
you'll improve.

[theMATEOlife]

technically speak you can't say some of those things.

i've bleed
i've cryed
i'm just stand on this rooftop

i think the fundamental problem with alot of beginning writers is the lack of understanding of and technical proficiency within the english language.