Flirt

[mydreamrewrite]

i never knew you had that in you, baring your chest and exposing those ribs.
those bones.
those pieces that hold you together.
this lens and this light and the way you spread your arms out, as if for
a crash landing.
a broken form lying naked on the floor.
.
..
...all for me.
yes, the way you give yourself to me (in most things).
that's when i really see you.
and broken... whole... it doesn't matter.
when i kissed you tonight,
you were inside me,
and i was inside you,
and we were one.

[a speedo model]

I don't know, it started off a bit weak. But the "This lens and this light..." line is great but then it sort of went down from there. keep writing though.