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theMATEOlife
12/10/06, 08:04 AM
this is the beat you can't run away from
that infectious dive, the unrelenting jive
of a woman you'll never be free of
thirsty for a drink you'll never be full of

a hospital room that will never be home for
the unending lies of society's watchful eyes
cancerous state of mal-aligned life lessons

but hey hey, it's magic.

a time you can't read on a clock you don't own
a life you can't lead in a world you don't know

in a room full of friends, you stand alone
like the ones before you, this isn't enough
but where can we get going when the going gets rough?

hippocrates sees everything we need
drifting through a microcosm of greed
walking is man's best medicine

the lives we've led and the books we've read in them

theMATEOlife
12/11/06, 09:37 PM
seriously my stuff will always suck unless you provide constructive criticisms.

a speedo model
12/11/06, 09:54 PM
I like this, I've always liked your work it's gotta a unique feel to it. Good stuff, man.

ChasityUndead
12/12/06, 08:10 AM
I dont hate it, but "hippocrate" is spelled wrong.

theMATEOlife
12/12/06, 09:22 AM
could you explain exactly how Hippocrates is spelled wrong?

Hippocrates is a Greek philosopher/ the father of medicine.

ChasityUndead
12/12/06, 09:49 AM
could you explain exactly how Hippocrates is spelled wrong?

Hippocrates is a Greek philosopher/ the father of medicine.

Sorry, Its spelled right,
I only saw "hippocrate"
but now I reread it and
see there is an s,

Im very tired and half asleep.
Forgive me, hah.

theMATEOlife
12/13/06, 12:26 PM
bump