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joker1648
12/13/06, 07:02 PM
everyday i think,
about The Ghost of You.
How i Can't Take It,
you not being there.
im in a Dark Light,
as this Land Of Confusion is all see.
in the Night Side Of Eden,
i call you mine,
but i just Wanna Hold Your Hand.
the Clocks tick down,
to when i can see you.
Scream Thy Last Scream,
as im Eyeless to see it,
im Paranoid,
always wondering.
i need to Walk away,
and take all the Pink Killer i can find.
it's Hard To Say,
that Yesterdays Feelings
are not but In Shadows And Dust.
The feeelings you had,
must be Missing In Action,
because this Eulogy For an Angel,
it doesn't seem like enough.
everything you've done so far have been Bricks,
building around me.
we've been Scattered,
not know How It's Gonna Be.
the Serenity i once felt,
Gone.

Remorse Is For the dead,
so don't say sorry.
just Break On Through the barrier,
and come Sail Away,
on the Seven Seas.
we're Ready to Fall,
Dazed and Confused with all we've done,
throughout the years,
and no Sister Christian can Save Me now.
I'm just a Stupid Motherfucker,
so Shut Me Up, and Bring The Pain.
Noting Else Matters,
and im gonna give it all up.
You are my Gaurdian Angel,
but im only Number Five.
the End Of A Heartache,
it won't come.
let's got to Coney Island,
and we'll be the Children Of The Sun.
Tears Don't Fall,
for the one that i lost.
but my Angel will Run Like Hell,
from the Attonement Of The Machine.
The Cradle To Enslave will make it
a Long Day's Night,
and realize That Every Day Is Exactly The Same.

so....In Regard To Myself,
i hope you Take This To Your Grave,
im Returning Empty-Handed,
off the Stairway To Heaven,
The Boy Who Blocked His Own Shot,
he no longer lives.
There Could Be Nothing After This broken heart.
More Than A Feeling,
keeps you running.
I come to you,
but you keep turning me away.
It's Good To Know That If I ever Need Atention,
All I Need To Do Is Die.
I'm Ready To Love,
but you were to scared.
Superstitious,that's saying it lightly.
You say thet Life's Been Good,
what a crock.
This Doesn't Remind Me,
but it does kill me to know
that is was just to weird.
You Hate the fact that i live in the fast lane,
but ended it All The Same.
Paint It Black,
your so-called "heart of gold",
because i'll ever get a hold of you.
Sweet Dreams,
no longer exist.

fifpb99
12/13/06, 07:14 PM
I'm gonna give this the benefit of the doubt and say its a serious post.

Anyways, I think if you were going to do something like this it would have to be more coherent and have more of a purpose and be less of a montage of songs you like.

joker1648
12/13/06, 07:16 PM
I'm gonna give this the benefit of the doubt and say its a serious post.

Anyways, I think if you were going to do something like this it would have to be more coherent and have more of a purpose and be less of a montage of songs you like.
did you actually read it? it has a purpose, i could have made it so much longer

fifpb99
12/13/06, 07:22 PM
did you actually read it? it has a purpose, i could have made it so much longer

Yes I read it. To me it seemed like everything else was just filler that you made try and fit with the song titles. If it had deeper meaning I didnt see it, but if it did, then cool.

joker1648
12/13/06, 07:27 PM
well, i actuall had to try to find song titles that were actuall song titles. and the deeper meaning is simple: why the fuck couldn't we talk, i miss you, and fuck you all put together

a speedo model
12/13/06, 07:39 PM
Was this supposed to be clever?

OveriseFan
12/13/06, 07:41 PM
Haha...

I wrote something like this once...

Only it was album titles, not song titles; I didn't use shitty song names; and it was actually kinda good...

A word to the wise: You will probably never be able to fit the word 'weird' into a song, and make it work...

And this is a shallow attempt at being clever, and it didn't work. Sorry buddy. How about writing something real? (Not being mean, just being blunt. I don't have the time to sugarcoat it for you.)

theMATEOlife
12/13/06, 09:47 PM
pompous.

joker1648
12/15/06, 08:52 AM
well thank you for your honesty and fuck you!

a speedo model
12/15/06, 08:57 AM
Yep, you'll last long here...

Kanashii
12/15/06, 08:59 AM
^ Shitty much?

fifpb99
12/15/06, 09:39 AM
well thank you for your honesty and fuck you!

If your going to post your poetry and/or songs up here you have to be ready and willing to take criticism. If you can't take constructive criticism it's better you read your work to someone who will lie to you. I suggest your mother or something.

wyverna
12/15/06, 10:55 AM
This reminds me of that GCH song that references bands.

theMATEOlife
12/15/06, 10:59 AM
This reminds me of that GCH song that references bands.

minus the cleverness

de la sympathie
12/15/06, 01:32 PM
This reminds me of that GCH song that references bands.

It's not even infintesimally as well put together or clever.

wyverna
12/15/06, 01:37 PM
minus the cleverness
It's not even infintesimally as well put together or clever.

I only read the first five lines :shrug:

de la sympathie
12/15/06, 01:43 PM
I only read the first five lines :shrug:

does not matter! haha. it was bad from the beginning.

ps: nice to see you.

wyverna
12/15/06, 01:49 PM
does not matter! haha. it was bad from the beginning.

ps: nice to see you.

i was just about to edit my post and be all, "HI SHAUNA!"

I haven't seen you around here in a while! it's nice to see you too!

wow, I used a lot of exclamation marks

and you're not prestigious anymore :(

suddenxsilence
12/15/06, 02:48 PM
wow i only read the first part and even that was force read. sorry hon but that was just about the hardest thing i have ever had to read. it didn't flow at all. but keep workin on it(not the poem the writing)