Hoods Up(burn It Down)

[xNEARTRAGEDYx]

Black Mailed
Black Listed
We've Absorbed Your Hate
Now We're Striking Back Like A Slug Into Your Brain
*a Taste Of Cyanide For The Entire Human Race,
Now Say Your Prayers As
The Mustard Gas Begins To Ventilate
Ive Come To Realze That Our Beliefs Are Estranged

Your Cabaret Will End Right Here
We're Forcing The New Face
Were Upholding The Right That We We're Promised
And Bringing For Your Fate

Chourus*

(hoods Up) We're Forcing The New Face
(guns Drawn) I Will Rectify Your Mistakes
(give Thanx) For The Bullet In Your Head
Give Thanx(you're Fucking Dead)

[jusscali]

hxc dood

[a speedo model]

Oh, fuck

[lostfear]

not my cup o tea. but I'm sure the scene will love you.

[a speedo model]

No, it won't.

[lostfear]

sarcasm my friend.

[a speedo model]

haha, I know.

[apoemtothedead]

Circle pit!!!

[thatwasamoment]

brootal

[Judge'sDaughter]

O.o the title reminds me of that hardcore band.
Anyway, the song was alright. I like the chorus.

[smokedsanity]

I saw that it was short and choppy, but didn't worry about that because I'm guessing it is in the style of hardcore. Then, I read the actual words and I'm sorry but it's pretty bad. I see no need to talk about slugs in brains and bullets in heads. If you must reference someone dying/ending...use some other means. I could go on, but I'll stop there.

[Mike Kraft]

i'll swoop and pull to this song all day long...
hardcore dancing for you idiots that dont know

[ArTkY_]

Breeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

[xNEARTRAGEDYx]

yeah it seems really short but the actual song has and intro/solo/breakdown

[xNEARTRAGEDYx]

I saw that it was short and choppy, but didn't worry about that because I'm guessing it is in the style of hardcore. Then, I read the actual words and I'm sorry but it's pretty bad. I see no need to talk about slugs in brains and bullets in heads. If you must reference someone dying/ending...use some other means. I could go on, but I'll stop there.
dude, the song is about WWII thus the mustard gas slug speak

[smokedsanity]

dude, the song is about WWII thus the mustard gas slug speak

Ok...that's all well and good, but "slug into your brain"/"bullet in your head" just sound childish.

I mean..."we're striking back like a slug into your brain"??? It sounds like that Ricky Martin song.

[OveriseFan]

dude, the song is about WWII thus the mustard gas slug speak

It still sucks...

[xNEARTRAGEDYx]

yeah maybe its childish but i just got into writing again, so i appreciate any comments on this

[lfdfforever]

two-step

[xNEARTRAGEDYx]

well the nexty song i'll talk about people being beaten to death with bananas and being eaten by tigers. is that less childish?

[buysoap]

I like this a lot. You show a lot of promise as a writer. Great metaphors

[TheKing]

the king thinks this sucks

[redsand62]

I like this a lot. You show a lot of promise as a writer. Great metaphors


I agree! Instead of bashing this guy so badly that he won't ever write lyrics/poetry again, we should give him some constructive criticism to promote his endeavors! I can sense a masterpiece on the horizon!





edit: just so everyone knows, that was sarcasm.

[AP_Punk]

i can hear the breakd0wnz.

hXc

[thatwasamoment]

well the nexty song i'll talk about people being beaten to death with bananas and being eaten by tigers. is that less childish?http://myspace.com/pulmonaryarchery666

oh my god you guys are fucking brooootal. no music up yet, who gives a fuck. please write the song about bananas.

[xNEARTRAGEDYx]

new song
baby i got a banana
you got a box of french fries
i choked the freaking chicken,
when you poked me in the eye

nooo i'll never take it back,
my sense has been turned to mustard
tim burton is gay, i dotn eat custard

your banana broke me
deeply
and i will never forget

[AP_Punk]

:-|

[OveriseFan]

This forum has gone to hell again...

I leave for a week and shit like this happens.