Catch Me, Never

[dakknox]

pitch black
much like that of your bleeding heart
the trust
was nothing but a failed test
i thought it was there
you won't let me rest
you haunt me
grasping for my last breathe
i won't let you have it
you will never have that chance

the time has passed
you will never catch me
it's over
with every tick of the clock
the gap is only widened
over and over
nonstop

i learned time is the most powerful tool
a hammer crushing and burying the memories
none are left
only those in which you disgust me remain
this mistake never again
with every glance
a nightmarish chill creeps down my spine
parallizing me
never again

the time has passed
you will never catch me
it's over
with every tick of the clock
the gap is only widened
over and over
nonstop

you will never catch me
you will never catch me
you will never catch me

[dakknox]

any comments? thankyou

[proeuthanasia]

reminds me of my mom. other than that, it's pretty good.

[lifelesslove]

i dunno, it may just be me, but this seems one of the reason why writers sometimes annoy me, this piece, it just seems so very ,very forced. i'm sure people could sometimes say my stuff looks forced, but i take hours pondering over what should go were. it seems like you idolize bands like finch so much, that you ineptly write just like them....you use good vocab, and good thoughts, but its not one of my favorite songs to me, i'm sorrry....like wade junkie says, this is just constructive criticism, for u to learn from

[dakknox]

thank you for your thoughts, it was one of the first songs i had ever written, i like it alot, meant something to me , later

[dakknox]

bumped up for new viewers, thankyou

[dakknox]

comments

[dakknox]

for the sound