Movie scripts.

[ForfeitClothing]

times moving so fast, and im moving so slow
as im keeping ahold of the memories you sold
from the movie scripts that didnt fit
with the stories that we told

so i'l forget your face
throughout the day
you'll forget everything ive said, by the time that i wake
drown out everything i say, for my own sake
i know it's tough but it might be enough

your old photo has a motto give in dont give up
but this time i swear it wont be enough
becuase i am standing stronger now,
then i ever have before

2007 all rights reserved Derek Lipscomb. AIM- whatruth is Myspace - www.myspace.com/forfeitclothing (http://www.myspace.com/forfeitclothing)

[RomeoAGoGo]

times moving so fast, and im moving so slow
as im keeping ahold of the memories you sold
from the movie scripts that didnt fit
with the stories that we told

so i'l forget your face
throughout the day
you'll forget everything ive said, by the time that i wake
drown out everything i say, for my own sake
i know it's tough but it might be enough

your old photo has a motto give in dont give up
but this time i swear it wont be enough
becuase i am standing stronger now,
then i ever have before

2007 all rights reserved Derek Lipscomb. AIM- whatruth is Myspace - www.myspace.com/forfeitclothing (http://www.myspace.com/forfeitclothing)



The last strophe is good. Everything else seems too forced and that you just rhymed for the sake of rhyming. Also you don't need to copyright your work on account that nobody is going to steal it.

[a speedo model]

I actually liked this. There are a few lines that were a bit cliche but you seemed to make them fit. This is one of those lyrics that the music would have a big effect on. It could be great with proper instrumentation and also really horrible without.

[lostfear]

I like some of the more abstract ideas you present here, but mostly it's cliche emo writing, but keep posting and try to strech your normal boundaries of writing.

[OveriseFan]

There's no need for that 'copyright' nonsense, because by posting it here on a forum it is copyrighted.

See the date there? That means anyone steals it, you show this thread in court and you have legal proof of it.