Culling Song

[wewin]

Title flat out stolen from Chuck Pahlahniuk's book, Lullaby.

The rest by me. Tear it apart, if you will.

Culling Song

This whole thing’s becoming a bore.
Praising the bones of our exhumed fathers
and polishing the circles we etch in the floor.

This whole thing should be left behind.
Dancing through the footsteps left by our leaders
and following any beaten path we find.

This whole thing might as well be dead.
Robbing the graves of buried insurrections,
leaving the truest words left unsaid.

That’s ordered chaos? No, that’s just order.
Moving in a circle is not a movement.
You want to do something about it? So do it.
“There’s always something more to say, so say it.” - Orchid

Shuffling the cards won’t make a new deck
Tempests would be deadly if we didn’t have them choreographed.
Cue the stampede and try to stay aligned.
Running with the wolf pack is just marching in a line.

[wadejunkie]

thats awesome

do you actually say "orchid" in the song?

[ADecentDay]

Truly magnificent. Your point is well spoken. I would appreciate it if you and Wade were to give me pointers on my work you both are talented and now alot about writing. It would really help me.

[wishxfulthinker]

Yeah, you rule - that book is GREAT.

....watch what you hear...;)

[decisionpending]

truly cool, best line:
Shuffling the cards won’t make a new deck
that is inspired!!! keep writing more, your criticism is great but your lyrics even better!!!

[dakknox]

hey that song is pretty rad, i thought that was the author who wrote fight club, i just checked it and it was, i'm gonna look into some of his work, i agree with the guy who said "shuffling the cards won't make a new deck" is a badass line, i wrote some cool shit about fight club i'ma post it sometime, later

[wewin]

no, i don't say orchid, that's just the band i stole that quoted line from, so i cited it. Thanks for the comments!

[BuriedAlive]

i dont see whats so awesome about it.

[lifelesslove]

no offense, sometimes things even can get a little deep for me...i'm into deep writing e.e cummings, and alot of other poets, but this seems like a vocabulary exhibit...no offense to you wewin, you know how to write, and i think that alot of inspiration can come from me reading your stuff, but i don't think this is the best peace by you. I need a little more emotion than this...it reminds me a little of at the drive in, or radiohead, not of which is bad, i just need to see it done...so i'm waiting to hear how that would sound...i'd like you to check up on my stuff sometime if you could, and see what you think...

[wewin]

lifeless, sure, i'll check out your stuff. um, it's late here (1:30 am, regardless of what the forum says) and i appreciate your comments. I'd like to talk more with you and stuff, but I'm going to bed now. You should bump your songs to the top so i can see them...my comp is slow and this website is slower, switching pages is a bitch.

[wewin]

bump