Hello!

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I know, my first post shouldn't really be a thread but I wanted your guys' opinions on this poem. I can handle your guys' shit so bring it on.



Stand Out:
Here’s something new and fresh
A little raw but I think you’ll like the potential
It’s without credentials
But would you really care?

I’m asking myself when and who and how?
It’ll be pretty interesting the reactions I’ll get
Maybe it’ll be our little secret
Already would have been the best time to start

Just watch and see
It’s better to be different than that same old shit
One more for the misfits,
Instead of picking me out of those beauty clones
(Thank god, thank god…)

Cheer up and know
You’re a little more normal (and better) than me
But would you really care?

My last wish is for you to check my pulse
After that scene
It should be your impulse
(But would you really care enough too?)

[apoemtothedead]

Terrible. God Awful.

[kshtoinks12]

I like this part:



This part need a little work:
Stand Out:
Here’s something new and fresh
A little raw but I think you’ll like the potential
It’s without credentials
But would you really care?

I’m asking myself when and who and how?
It’ll be pretty interesting the reactions I’ll get
Maybe it’ll be our little secret
Already would have been the best time to start

Just watch and see
It’s better to be different than that same old shit
One more for the misfits,
Instead of picking me out of those beauty clones
(Thank god, thank god…)

Cheer up and know
You’re a little more normal (and better) than me
But would you really care?

My last wish is for you to check my pulse
After that scene
It should be your impulse
(But would you really care enough too?)

[lostfear]

that's actually pretty funny. except it's mean as fuck.

[kshtoinks12]

Thank you! That's exactly what I was going for!