My own song..

[UsedSid27Grl]

Just something i had typed up on the computer so i thought id share it with you guys...

"Friend"

I thought i had a friend once
But it was only my reflection
No fairy tale here
Just a girl with no reason
Thats how we feel sometimes
Thats how i felt today
But i got thru it all
I found my own way

This isnt yours
This is mine
Im almost home
Then ill be fine
Knocked down
Tripped agian
Yeah your wrong
Unloyal friend

I think ive been shot agian
But why dont i feel anything
There isnt any pain
Am i a normal human being?
They never belive me
When i say im okay
But i know i am
Ive just had a bad day

What do you think??...:confused:

[BuriedAlive]

you should just start over. your not writing a song your writing whats on your mind. it needs alot of work.

[proeuthanasia]

Originally posted by BuriedAlive
you should just start over. your not writing a song your writing whats on your mind. it needs alot of work.


agreed. except one thing: 'you're not writing a song, you're writing whats on your mind'....wtf chris? lyrics are thoughts on paper...so what else would she be writing about other than what's on her mind? exactly. you're right about it needing a lot of work though. uh, girl who wrote the song, whatever your name is, good start...just revise it..make the verses a little longer or more creative perhaps.

[BuriedAlive]

i meant it that by he doesnt try to make a song just write the song. if he woulda made an effort to actually write a song. its hard to explain.

[UsedSid27Grl]

well thanks for ur opinions.. but yah that song was written coming from my mind.. not just something i wanted to write about. i was having a bad day and i just wrote... besides i new at song writting and i know it need works... but thnx anyways

[BuriedAlive]

i can tell it has meaning but it has no formation. work on it dont stop cuz you got some critizism