One Simple Dream - Corrected

[TheFallenScene]

Version one of the song was terrible. But I moved some lyrics and added some new ones. Hopefully it looks better. And enjoy, thank you.


One Simple Dream

I’ve been screaming for days
Drained from the fear of failing
Everyday putting a new wound in me
From scratch comes a fragile beauty
A spiral into oblivion for all I care
The composure of an artist erased

(Chorus)
A natural passion hated
Taking pity I surrender
One simple dream, still forgotten
A dream twisted into a lost cause

Feeling endless makes the strain of envy
Which drifts into a defeating creed
Beliefs now lost for something so naive
A prospect never to come has diminished reassurance
Assure me of imagination to scamper back to
As I scramble with the words
Finding myself to be less grateful
Trembling with fear draws me back into tears
Just trying to piece together perfection

(Chorus)
A natural passion hated
Taking pity I surrender
One simple dream, still forgotten
A dream twisted into a lost cause

(Faintly Said)
I can’t wait for that moment to say "Goodbye" to old times

[TheFallenScene]

Can someone please take a look at this..tell me what you think because I updated the song and all. Thanks. :D

[BuriedAlive]

its alot better but i still think you should keep working on it. work on the 1st verse a little more. its still a good song the chorus is pretty good and is better than before.

[TheFallenScene]

Oh..I didn't mean to reply to my own song moving it back up. Good Day. :rolleyes: