i just wrote a song for my band, tell me what you think!

[Misha-chan]

okay, heres the song i wrote a little while ago, its called Just A Dream (Wake Up):



Last night I had a dream
With you and I
We were back together
True love
Let it last forever
But it was just a dream


One step closer; let’s talk
Two steps closer; let’s share our time
Three steps closer; let’s start over
Too bad it was all
Just a Dream

One step
Two steps
Three steps
I wish it were true
But it’s just a dream

Wake into reality

It won’t happen

Wake up
Wake up
It won’t happen
Realize the truth
That we can’t be together
(Or so I know)

One step closer; let’s talk
Two steps closer; let’s share our time
Three steps closer; let’s start over
Too bad it was all
Just a Dream
(Wake up, wake up)

One step
Two steps
Three steps
I wish it were true
But it’s just a dream

Wake into reality
It won’t happen

I don’t know
It’s my fault
Is it my fault?
I’m taken aback
What was it really?

Maybe one day
I’ll wake up
And it will be true
Then and only then
Far into my future
I’ll wake up next to you
And you’ll love me too

One step closer; let’s talk
Two steps closer; let’s share our time
Three steps closer; let’s start over
Too bad it was all
Just a Dream

One step
Two steps
Three steps
I wish it were true
But it’s just a dream

Wake into reality
It won’t happen
(One, two, three)
(Wake up)






its not that good but its my fave...tell me wat you think!!

[AP_Punk]

Oh, I see.

[Misha-chan]

is it good?

[AP_Punk]

:piss:

[Misha-chan]

:piss:

WTF?????? lol

[falloutboy.]

:piss:
hahahahaha that is so random i lol'd pretty loud. i like the lyrics and they way they flow.

[xwisebuddhax]

Not a fan of it... too cliche, too whiny sorry.

[Misha-chan]

hahahahaha that is so random i lol'd pretty loud. i like the lyrics and they way they flow.

thanks!!

[Misha-chan]

Not a fan of it... too cliche, too whiny sorry.

kay, thanks 4 letting me know!!

[Misha-chan]

Not a fan of it... too cliche, too whiny sorry.

wait just one more thing...how is it too cliche and can you define that please? im not too sure on the definition, sorry!

[espguitars723]

yea a little to "its been done" just write about unused subjects or use big words lol

[xwisebuddhax]

okay, heres the song i wrote a little while ago, its called Just A Dream (Wake Up):



Last night I had a dream
With you and I
We were back together
True love
Let it last forever
But it was just a dream



its not that good but its my fave...tell me wat you think!!

Things ike that, just its been said before, not trying to be a dick, it happens to me all the time, just trying to help.

[espguitars723]

im not trying to be a dick either trust me i used to write like this, love songs and stuff have been done to much by everyone if ure trying to get a girl and ure playin this acousticly ud be set but for a band no. originality is needed so much in the musical world today

[xwisebuddhax]

im not trying to be a dick either trust me i used to write like this, love songs and stuff have been done to much by everyone if ure trying to get a girl and ure playin this acousticly ud be set but for a band no. originality is needed so much in the musical world today

Agreed, but then again, my recordings blow...

[Hot Damn]

reading that was more like just a nightmare...

zing!

[Misha-chan]

yea a little to "its been done" just write about unused subjects or use big words lol

ya thats exactly wat i was trying 2 do...! use bigger and more complicated words! lol

[a speedo model]

Too cliche, all your thoughts feel unoriginal and forced. But continue to write, it takes time.

[Misha-chan]

Too cliche, all your thoughts feel unoriginal and forced. But continue to write, it takes time.

well, ya... thats only the third song ive ever written, so im sure thats the problem. i can say 4 sure, whether it sounds unoriginal, like i took it from something or not, that its written about pure truth, so ya... i agree, i probably just need 2 continue writing, theyll get better with more experience...