Seven Days - my newest song, feedback would be cool

[MaybeOneDay]

Alright, so i met this chick this past week while i was at my cottage. Thing's started out slow, but then we really hit it off. I like her so much and so i wrote this song. She's one of the coolest people ive ever met and today when we all came home from the cottage, I had to say goodbye to her. And that really fucking sucks. The thing is, she lives a big distance away and so here's my pussy ass love song. It fuckin hurt me to write this shit and you can laugh all you want, i don't care, but just read it if ya have a few minutes. Alright, here we go:




" Seven Day's "

Verse 1
Just like a shot to the face
I'm sure her life is great
But I'll never know
Because we're going home
Yeah I'll never know
Because we're going home (hold this)
And like a knife to the wound
Is when she look's at you
And then for seven day's
She sat by my side
And for seven day's
She sat by my side (hold this)

Pre-Chorus
I miss her so much
And For that I can't hide
I think about her at night
Wishing she was mine
Wishing she was mine (hold this)

Chorus
How will I ever become stronger
When you're gone for how much longer
How could I ever forget your name
When you're lost for endless long day's
How will I ever live on stronger
When you've passed for how much longer
How could I ever not feel this way
When you make it so damn easy

Verse 2
Just like a foot full of glass
We watched as this week passed
And then we made our way
Out to the open door
Yeah we made our way
Out to the open door (hold this)
And like sea full of tears
I watched you drive away
And you can't look back
Because you're gone away
No you can't look back
Because you're gone away (hold this)

Pre-Chorus
I miss her the most
And for that I can't hide
I think about her at night
Wishing she was mine
Wishing she was mine (hold this)

Chorus
How will I ever become stronger
When you're gone for how much longer
How could I ever forget your name
When you're lost for endless long day's
How will I ever live on stronger
When you've passed for how much longer
How could I ever not feel this way
When you make it so damn easy

Bridge
I keep thinking about you
Over and over again
I keep dreaming about you
Over and over again
I can't stop thinking about you
Over and over again
I wish I could see you
Over and over and over again

Chorus
How will I ever become stronger
When you're gone for how much longer
How could I ever forget your name
When you're lost for endless long day's
How will I ever live on stronger
When you've passed for how much longer
How could I ever not feel this way
When you make it so damn easy

Verse 3
Just how you sat in my room
Waiting for your ride
I was thinking of you
When you were by my side
Just how you said goodbye
After seven nights
But now you've gone back home
Yeah you've gone back home (hold this)

Chorus
How will I ever become stronger
When you're gone for how much longer
How could I ever forget your name
When you're lost for endless long day's
How will I ever live on stronger
When you've passed for how much longer
How could I ever not feel this way
When you make it so damn easy

[Greg]

that sucks that she lives far away man. i like the song though... welcome back...

[**michelleV**]

well, i liked it...and i think its nice you wrote a song for her

[StartingLine182]

Thats a good song. I would love to hear it.

[MaybeOneDay]

thanks alot to the bunch of you...it's good to be back here....and yeah, it does really suck that she live's far away...but im not letting this one get away. right now it feels like she's gone forever..but i wont let that happen....anyways, thanks alot

and yeah, i thought she deserved a song. again, im such a pussy when i say this, but after spending just one week with her, she means SO much to me.:)

[**michelleV**]

well, you sound all happy she must be great.

[Greg]

Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
thanks alot to the bunch of you...it's good to be back here....and yeah, it does really suck that she live's far away...but im not letting this one get away. right now it feels like she's gone forever..but i wont let that happen....anyways, thanks alot

and yeah, i thought she deserved a song. again, im such a pussy when i say this, but after spending just one week with her, she means SO much to me.:)

i know how you feel... good luck.

[MaybeOneDay]

Originally posted by **michelleV**
well, you sound all happy she must be great.

oh she is, its crazy how much i like her....sure, maybe its just lust...but somehow i doubt it.

and yeah greg, thanks dude. it sucks to have to say goodbye to someone you love, but ye know. its the way life goes. im not gonna go all emo (although theres nothing wrong with that)...im just gonna do what i said i was gonna do, and thats not let this one get away.

[Greg]

Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
oh she is, its crazy how much i like her....sure, maybe its just lust...but somehow i doubt it.

and yeah greg, thanks dude. it sucks to have to say goodbye to someone you love, but ye know. its the way life goes. im not gonna go all emo (although theres nothing wrong with that)...im just gonna do what i said i was gonna do, and thats not let this one get away.

well whatever you're going to do i wish you luck on getting her.

[FishAlotNBePunk]

it sucks. :D

[**michelleV**]

Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
oh she is, its crazy how much i like her....sure, maybe its just lust...but somehow i doubt it.

and yeah greg, thanks dude. it sucks to have to say goodbye to someone you love, but ye know. its the way life goes. im not gonna go all emo (although theres nothing wrong with that)...im just gonna do what i said i was gonna do, and thats not let this one get away. hey if its meant to be its gonna happen! i know it sounds stupid but i believe it.

[Greg]

hey brandon look at how many posts i have....

[MaybeOneDay]

yeah man that's fucked up...i just might have to...ummm...lower..your post count...hahaha, nah i dont care man, good work. keep at it.


and yes, this is deffinately meant to be. i've decided in about 5 days or so im gonna show up at her house and tell her exactly how i feel about her....oh, did i mention she has no idea i feel this way about her at the moment ?

[Greg]

Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
yeah man that's fucked up...i just might have to...ummm...lower..your post count...hahaha, nah i dont care man, good work. keep at it.


and yes, this is deffinately meant to be. i've decided in about 5 days or so im gonna show up at her house and tell her exactly how i feel about her....oh, did i mention she has no idea i feel this way about her at the moment ?

-haha i have no life....

-dude thats gonna be scary as hell. i would eb super nervous. especially since you have to drive a ways away.but good luck. i hope it works out.

[Clarett'sGreyGoose]

That's good man. I know where you're at. Situation completely understood. I still envy the fact you can finish a song and I can't.

[Greg]

Originally posted by PlaysWithFire
That's good man. I know where you're at. Situation completely understood. I still envy the fact you can finish a song and I can't.

finishing songs are easy... well actually it depends. recently i havent been able to write 1 song all the way through... but usually i can write a whole song. i dunno whats wrong with me right now. but i cant finish songs

[**michelleV**]

Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
yeah man that's fucked up...i just might have to...ummm...lower..your post count...hahaha, nah i dont care man, good work. keep at it.


and yes, this is deffinately meant to be. i've decided in about 5 days or so im gonna show up at her house and tell her exactly how i feel about her....oh, did i mention she has no idea i feel this way about her at the moment ? .............maybe you should talk to her first. Don't set yourself up for a fall

[Greg]

Originally posted by **michelleV**
.............maybe you should talk to her first. Don't set yourself up for a fall

sometimes you just need to take a risk....

[MaybeOneDay]

finishing song's is easy. well, ill speak for myself on this one. if i have an idea, or a topic to write about, especially if its a personal experience like in this song for example, then the lyrics and music just come to me. instantly. its kinda scary sometimes.

and about the talking to her first, thats what ive done. for the last seven days. i tried to spend as much time with her as possible and we hit it off so amazingly well. so im gonna take a risk on this one, i think its the right thing to do. it'll show her just how much she means to me then i'll tell her how i feel just to seal the deal. hopefully.

[**michelleV**]

Originally posted by Greg
sometimes you just need to take a risk.... some risk!

[**michelleV**]

Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
finishing song's is easy. well, ill speak for myself on this one. if i have an idea, or a topic to write about, especially if its a personal experience like in this song for example, then the lyrics and music just come to me. instantly. its kinda scary sometimes.

and about the talking to her first, thats what ive done. for the last seven days. i tried to spend as much time with her as possible and we hit it off so amazingly well. so im gonna take a risk on this one, i think its the right thing to do. it'll show her just how much she means to me then i'll tell her how i feel just to seal the deal. hopefully. well good luck, ok.:)

[MaybeOneDay]

thanks alot, i really appreciate it :)