The Exploding Man

[a_safe_bet]

Avarice
The seed made the scientist
And he gave us the exploding man
A train set
something of a god-like role
as a child he crashed them every night.

If you know him
Bring him an antidote
He talks with handshakes and crop circles...

...and inside him sleeps a monster
Inside him sleeps a monster
Sleeps inside of him.

Calculate
Long division is a metaphor
He'd rather be the take away

"Well we're talking to the exploding man today"
"He's speaking in tongues and tobacco smoke"
"He's speaking but his mouth is closed"

He is nothing but a sycophant
Nothing but a sycophant
Nothing but a sycophant
But made in our image.

And inside him sleeps a monster.
And inside him sleeps a monster.
And inside him sleeps a monster.

[apoemtothedead]

The only safe bet here is you getting laughed at if you read this to your friend(s).

[Harold Wood]

were you raped as a child?

[strobelife]

lol, mark really gets excited about taking down a first timer.

friend(s) Hilarious

I liked it. Although some parts were repetative. That would have to be my only qualm... repetition.

[utgjames]

eh, i enjoyed it, but not in a complete lasting sense...the repetition gets me too...i dont care for it.

[apoemtothedead]

were you raped as a child?
Nope. You?

[Harold Wood]

Nope. You?

I meant the poster ha

[a_safe_bet]

no rape for me no

[apoemtothedead]

I meant the poster ha
Your lack of answer suggests that you're hiding something. It's okay, it's Uncle Mark, you can tell me.

[a_safe_bet]

the fact that you know uncle mark scares me

[yesterday4life]

why am i the only one who doesnt get confusing poems...

[RomeoAGoGo]

This is actually quite good.

A little abstract and floaty, but with revision can be fixed up.

Avarice
The seed made the scientist
And he gave us the exploding man
A train set
something of a god-like role
as a child he crashed them every night. I loved this metaphor.

If you know him
Bring him an antidote
He talks with handshakes and crop circles... <-- This part confused me. Handshakes and crop circles?

...and inside him sleeps a monster
Inside him sleeps a monster
Sleeps inside of him. if this is a song then it works. if this is a poem then you don't need the repetition.

Calculate
Long division is a metaphor
He'd rather be the take away I'd try and find another way of saying 'take away'

"Well we're talking to the exploding man today"
"He's speaking in tongues and tobacco smoke" Good.
"He's speaking but his mouth is closed"

He is nothing but a sycophant
Nothing but a sycophant
Nothing but a sycophant
But made in our image.

And inside him sleeps a monster.
And inside him sleeps a monster.
And inside him sleeps a monster.


7.5/10

[a_safe_bet]

yeah it is a song

[yesterday4life]

i give it a 0/10, its confusing!

[strobelife]

i give it a 0/10, its confusing!
You know, the only way you could be more useless right now is if you actually were a wall. Now, it certainly is true that you'd at least be serving a purpose - specifically a surface for a jackass to lean against - but it could be argued that you reading something you dont get is more useless than doing nothing.

[a speedo model]

Your lack of answer suggests that you're hiding something. It's okay, it's Uncle Mark, you can tell me.
Uncle Mark cannot be trusted!!! I know this.
why am i the only one who doesnt get confusing poems...
Because you were dropped as a child, duh!

[naughty_or_nice]

Because you were dropped as a child, duh!
~~~~~~~~~
NO she wasnt, if she was i would have been there!

[RomeoAGoGo]

Mark = naughty or nice.