First time writer

[kage3212]

hey guys im just starting to write and all that and i know im not very good at it so i came here looking for help on what i can do better and how i can improve my writing to a higher level so here some is.....

Seeking the worst of worst
Your situations worse than this barrel
And this bullet screams to end it all
But you have no clue

This trigger is for the weak
You wait for the day
To swim in peoples sorrow
If this is the descision of choice
I hope you never see tomorrow

The reaccurance of doubt runs full
When your ego runs on E
This pitty you sought after
Could come with one movement
Dont look back...this was your act

This trigger is for the weak
You wait for the day
To swim in peoples sorrow
If this is the descision of choice
I hope you never see tomorrow

One movement One Pull
One Idiot One fool
One movement One Pull
One Idiot One fool

Looking down never seemed so bad
Looking back never seemed so sad
You brought your own fate
You met this gate

[kage3212]

Coming to truth never was easy
One more chance to tell you
I actually do miss what was there
But im sure your too busy with your hair

Rip out my lungs
Breath for me
Believe me I would have let you
You took my heart out
And threw it to sea
But im sure you never meant to

A game of cards
I called way too soon
Ya....I lost the hand
But no one makes the same mistake twice

A forgotten year
That never seemed so forgotten
And that familiar face of yours
It never seemed so unfamiliar
Its strange how things work
Its strange how this worked

Rip out my lungs
Breath for me
Believe me I would have let you
You took my heart out
And threw it to sea
But im sure you never meant to

You moved on
Ive been gone
Your words have been said
My tongues dead
It regrets not giving you the bitter feeling you left me.........

[kage3212]

any suggestions anyone?

[MaybeOneDay]

no real suggestions...but all i can say is that i liked it. good work.:)

[Rufio217]

And this bullet screams to end it all.


ha ha ha...i love that line