21 gun salute.

[xAlexisonfirex]

this is a 21 gun salute straight from my heart.

take this invitation, and come crash my party
i'd love to clean up your mess, don't get me started
i am the worst of your dreams, but the best of your nightmares
and i will haunt your every nights sleep

you are the bullet, headed directly at my heart
i am the hopeless man, doomed from the start
i will lay back, and let your bullet wound me
maybe ill bleed to death

wake up my dear, you were singing in your sleep
your voice is too beautiful, it ruins me

sometimes i make you coffee, in the morning
i hold the poison over the cup, for a good minute or two
asking myself, what should i do
should i end it all here, without asking you?

and i ask myself, what good owuld it do?
if i killed you now, my love would still reign true

[xAlexisonfirex]

um can someone give any sort of feedback ont he shit i write? its really pissing me off, so many people post the same exact shit and they get like 10 replies, ive gotten that amount of replies in like 15 topics...give or take.

[dakknox]

i like the feel of this song expecially in the beggining. the first line is way rad, probably said in an intense manner which reflects that of my writing. the first 5 lines i really like

[wewin]

sifting through weathered photo albums looking for gloriously aged polaroids
of places you have never been. A place to accept that you don't really
exist. "Smile for the camera sweet heart, I really want to immortalize this
moment" but just remember the first step in forgetting is destroying all the
evidence. with friends like you who needs subtext. THIS IS A 44. CALIBER
LOVE LETTER STRAIGHT FROM MY HEART. Straight from
my heart (deal with it)

this is a 21 gun salute straight from my heart.
"this is a .44 caliber love letter straight from my heart."
-alexisonfire
I like how you write about a pathetic love for a girl in a boring and unoriginal way. I like how you shamelessly steal from alexisonfire, and I like how you picked a not-incredible band to shamelessly steal from.

I like how the first line of your song doesn't make sense--you can't crash a party if you're invited.

I like how this song reminds me of every other shitty pop punk song, especially the parts where you contemplate suicide (wholly unoriginal--you're a genius). I love how you've adopted the attitude in the song of loving someone who is wrong for you, because that's what every bad song is about.

I like the bad imagery and poetry of the whole "bullet" stanza, and I like how you again contemplate your own death.

I like how this song is a pathetic song that you probably think is sweet or dark, but is really just boring and dumb.

You'll probably like it on these forums. You'll get a lot of praise for some real hackwork.

[xAlexisonfirex]

dude, whats wrong with you?

are you conor oberst? dustin kensrue? tim kasher? chris connely? No? then you shouldn't be ripping shit like you do.

[MaybeOneDay]

Originally posted by wewin
sifting through weathered photo albums looking for gloriously aged polaroids
of places you have never been. A place to accept that you don't really
exist. "Smile for the camera sweet heart, I really want to immortalize this
moment" but just remember the first step in forgetting is destroying all the
evidence. with friends like you who needs subtext. THIS IS A 44. CALIBER
LOVE LETTER STRAIGHT FROM MY HEART. Straight from
my heart (deal with it)

this is a 21 gun salute straight from my heart.
"this is a .44 caliber love letter straight from my heart."
-alexisonfire
I like how you write about a pathetic love for a girl in a boring and unoriginal way. I like how you shamelessly steal from alexisonfire, and I like how you picked a not-incredible band to shamelessly steal from.

I like how the first line of your song doesn't make sense--you can't crash a party if you're invited.

I like how this song reminds me of every other shitty pop punk song, especially the parts where you contemplate suicide (wholly unoriginal--you're a genius). I love how you've adopted the attitude in the song of loving someone who is wrong for you, because that's what every bad song is about.

I like the bad imagery and poetry of the whole "bullet" stanza, and I like how you again contemplate your own death.

I like how this song is a pathetic song that you probably think is sweet or dark, but is really just boring and dumb.

You'll probably like it on these forums. You'll get a lot of praise for some real hackwork.

dude that was pathetic. he tried his best i imagine, and he had a damn good result. sure that line may sound alittle like alexisonfire, but who gives a fuck ? who are you to rip on other peoples work.


anways, i liked the song. alot. good work man.

[wewin]

I like how maturely you can take criticism, especially how you can take it without the use of anger or profanity.

I like you. A lot. I hope you don't die soon.

[xAlexisonfirex]

i can take criticism fine, but i cannot take sarcastic remarks about how bad what i write is by a fucking fruitcake. that angers me.

i like how you can be so cool, and witty over the internet. i bet you have alot of friends. i hope you don't die soon.

read my post directly to you...a man of your intelligence should be able to find it...it's titled "Wewin"

[wewin]

Dude, you're right!! I was SO totally able to find that "wewin" thing! I read it after this one though, which is why my response here isn't as penitent as you thought it may be.

I actually like how you totally acknowledged how awesome I really am!

"I bet you have alot of friends"-->I bet you have a lot of friends.

Alot isn't a word. I win on grammar points!

The tone in this post is "mean, in a friendly-joke way". Just so you don't misinterpret me.

And, let's see. It's cool how you think that whoever has the most friends is the best! It makes life so much easier, since now I realize that the football jocks and the skaters and the cheerleaders, and EVEN the bitter internet writers, if they have more friends than me, they MUST be better people. Cool, thanks for clearing that up.

Hey, let's play nice from now on. Read the "Wewin" post for my response. A man of your intelligence should be able to find it just fine, 'specially since you posted it.

Flame war forever!!! bye bye