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Clarett'sGreyGoose
07/19/03, 04:39 PM
check out the song I wrote here, i need opinions and the like. song (http://forum.absolutepunk.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=20963)
papathomas
07/19/03, 04:40 PM
jerry, help me help you!
Clarett'sGreyGoose
07/19/03, 04:54 PM
how may i help you thomas?
SonnyPunk
07/19/03, 05:21 PM
Good effort man. My only criticism however, is that it's a little too straight-forward. You should try and write it so people have to interperet it in their own way. But its cool, good job
Clarett'sGreyGoose
07/19/03, 05:23 PM
i tried to write it straight-forward. i'm thinking about giving it to her....i wasn't even gonna post it here until Brandon convinced me to.
SonnyPunk
07/19/03, 05:26 PM
Thats cool then if thats what you were going for.
Clarett'sGreyGoose
07/20/03, 06:21 AM
bump
MaybeOneDay
07/20/03, 06:25 AM
Originally posted by PlaysWithFire
i tried to write it straight-forward. i'm thinking about giving it to her....i wasn't even gonna post it here until Brandon convinced me to.

yeah man its a good thing you posted it...i knew people would like it!
Clarett'sGreyGoose
07/20/03, 06:32 AM
Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
yeah man its a good thing you posted it...i knew people would like it!

your songs make me wet.:eek:
MaybeOneDay
07/20/03, 07:48 AM
Originally posted by PlaysWithFire
your songs make me wet.:eek:

i want to sex up your song
bigweener
07/20/03, 07:55 AM
Originally posted by SonnyPunk
Good effort man. My only criticism however, is that it's a little too straight-forward. You should try and write it so people have to interperet it in their own way. But its cool, good job

i agree, although i thought it was good. just my opinion, but I like things more poetic. It looks like you tried harder. good job tho. and good luck with the lady.
MaybeOneDay
07/20/03, 08:12 AM
you must all go read my songs if you have not already...go now...there is like 4 in the your lyrics forum. please read em and let me know what you think.

heh;)
Clarett'sGreyGoose
07/20/03, 08:46 AM
Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
you must all go read my songs if you have not already...go now...there is like 4 in the your lyrics forum. please read em and let me know what you think.

heh;)


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