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MaybeOneDay
07/21/03, 05:01 PM
http://forum.absolutepunk.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=21142

its untitled and needs a name..any suggestions ? also leave your comments about it.

oh and check out any others written by me in the your lyrics forum...cause theres some awesome ones...by some talented writers in there.
omegaX
07/21/03, 05:58 PM
I was reading "The ex" in your signature by accident! And thank god that wasn't you, that sucked. Yours was good though. I'd love to hear some music with it.
MapleLeaf
07/21/03, 06:01 PM
people dont read that stuff for a reason. and if anyone else made a post liek this you would delete it or move it.
proeuthanasia
07/21/03, 06:08 PM
it's pretty good. work on its flow..it has potential. as for a name? hmm...something like 'and the sky came crashing' or something.

since you've opened the door for lyrics posts in the general forum, look at mine...i need some more opinions. just two verses and also nameless, but check it out

http://forum.absolutepunk.net/showthread.php?s=&postid=289544#post289544
MapleLeaf
07/21/03, 07:05 PM
Originally posted by proeuthanasia
since you've opened the door for lyrics posts in the general forum, look at mine...i need some more opinions. just two verses and also nameless, but check it out

http://forum.absolutepunk.net/showthread.php?s=&postid=289544#post289544

ok i take back what i said.. cross posting is fine as long as its for something good. and thats really good.
proeuthanasia
07/21/03, 08:17 PM
Originally posted by Banned
ok i take back what i said.. cross posting is fine as long as its for something good. and thats really good.

thanks
MaybeOneDay
07/22/03, 02:44 AM
Originally posted by Banned
people dont read that stuff for a reason. and if anyone else made a post liek this you would delete it or move it.

jerry made one the other day for his song in this forum ? did i delete that ? i think not.
blaarg
07/22/03, 01:34 PM
that's pretty good, i'd probably go with whoever said "and the sky came crashing" or something along the lines of "last call"

anyway, good job
MaybeOneDay
07/22/03, 01:38 PM
Originally posted by blaarg
that's pretty good, i'd probably go with whoever said "and the sky came crashing" or something along the lines of "last call"

anyway, good job

thanks...yeap im gonna go with "and the sky came crashing"..i like that title alot.
omegaX
07/22/03, 03:09 PM
Originally posted by blaarg
that's pretty good, i'd probably go with whoever said "and the sky came crashing" or something along the lines of "last call"

anyway, good job

Agreed. That kinda sounds like a Thrice title to me. Anyone notice that? I guess it's the new album titles that get me.
chrisepp4
07/22/03, 03:40 PM
actually you should call it "generic 'writtin a thousand times over' emo pop song". no offense.
MaybeOneDay
07/23/03, 02:25 AM
Originally posted by chrisepp4
actually you should call it "generic 'writtin a thousand times over' emo pop song". no offense.

thanks dude

you've just motivated me to write more generic non emo non pop songs. if you had actually taken the 9 iron out of your ass before you read it, you might have realised it may not be a emo pop song. its actually a semi fast punk song along the lines of jersey or rancid. but thanks cuntscab.
MapleLeaf
07/23/03, 09:24 AM
Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
thanks...yeap im gonna go with "and the sky came crashing"..i like that title alot.

which looks like a ripoff of the band skycamefalling
MaybeOneDay
07/23/03, 12:00 PM
Originally posted by Banned
which looks like a ripoff of the band skycamefalling

what a tragedy
xAlexisonfirex
07/23/03, 08:58 PM
you dont understand. nothing in the future of writing can use anythign that slightly resembles anything else int he world.

if you said "the tv turned to static" it would be too close of a reference to a static lullaby.
MapleLeaf
07/23/03, 10:40 PM
no its just the names are really close. and skycamefalling owns the pants off of brandons song. the end.
MaybeOneDay
07/24/03, 03:38 AM
well to be honest, i didn't expect you to like it cole
chrisepp4
07/27/03, 05:22 PM
Originally posted by MaybeOneDay
thanks dude

you've just motivated me to write more generic non emo non pop songs. if you had actually taken the 9 iron out of your ass before you read it, you might have realised it may not be a emo pop song. its actually a semi fast punk song along the lines of jersey or rancid. but thanks cuntscab.

The point is, whether its emo, fast punk, or whatever, its the same whiny teenage heartbreak song that people keep writing. I even find myself jotting down lyrics that sounded like they could be sited from just about any band ever. all i'm saying is, try originality, or take the message you were trying to get across in the song and deliver in a different/unique style. Just trying to give some constructive critisicm.
MaybeOneDay
07/29/03, 07:15 AM
Originally posted by chrisepp4
The point is, whether its emo, fast punk, or whatever, its the same whiny teenage heartbreak song that people keep writing. I even find myself jotting down lyrics that sounded like they could be sited from just about any band ever. all i'm saying is, try originality, or take the message you were trying to get across in the song and deliver in a different/unique style. Just trying to give some constructive critisicm.

yeah, sorry i flipped before. thanks. ill consider your criticism.