spin rinse cycle

[xAlexisonfirex]

do it. kill yourself, blow up a building, sing a catchy tune. it won't effect the world, the leaves will still fall in autumn as they always do. our lives so insignificant but so magnificent. only when put underneath the microscope called the human brain can be completely seen, and still nobody knows.

constantly evolving without ever knowing it. earth is just another load of laundry shoved into the washing machine. spin rinse cycle. we go through our steps and phases of life just like the machine goes through its. we evolve into humans, it changes to rinse. when the buzzer goes off we are tugged out and thrown into the dryer called eternity.

repeat, but with a new batch.

like moving to the top of the bleachers in a conversation with friends, we evolve from our lowest form to our highest. perfection. then it fails. perfect is a figment of our imagination to keep us striving to better ourselves. but when we reach that highest level of humanity, we are tossed in the dryer to burn the perfection from our skin.

[wewin]

do it. kill yourself, blow up a building, sing a catchy tune. it won't effect the world, the leaves will still fall in autumn as they always do. our lives so insignificant but so magnificent. only when put underneath the microscope called the human brain can be completely seen, and still nobody knows.

It's "affect" not "effect". I understand the point you're making, but I don't agree with it.

I think that the "laundry" metaphor set you're using is a little hard to grasp, and you seem to know that too, because you feel that it's necessary to point out what you mean.
example: "we go through...goes through its." This sentence is an explanation of your "washing machine" metaphor, but I think that if the metaphor can't stand alone without an explanation, you should change it or refine it, somehow.

Also, I'm not really sure why you compare human evolution to a washer and dryer...you could make this song much better if you could also use the ideas of things like "wet laundry", "darks and lights", "soap", just something to make the laundry theme more obvious and cool. Something to make it more sensual and less cerebral, you know?

The line "perfect...better ourselves" seems forced. This seems like a raw line, meaning that the idea it expresses fits into the song, but the language itself doesn't. It seems like the "rough draft" version of a line that SHOULD go into the song. Change it so that it expresses the same idea but fits better with the song. As it is now, it kind of sounds like a rant or an explanation rather than lyrics.

Tell me what you're trying to say with the washer/dryer theme, it has a lot of potential. Tell me what you think of my comments, too.

Everything I didn't comment on is fine, but I know that you could probably make it better, too.

[xAlexisonfirex]

it was a rant/monologue meant to be yelled but not quite screamed with little music behind it to start off an album.

"do it. kill yourself, blow up a building, sing a catchy tune. it won't effect the world, the leaves will still fall in autumn as they always do. our lives so insignificant but so magnificent. only when put underneath the microscope called the human brain can be completely seen, and still nobody knows. "

in this universe nobody knows what surrounds us. there could be 5 billion other races like humans. we aren't important to the bigger picture, just to us. we are only what we know and what we can see.

"constantly evolving without ever knowing it. earth is just another load of laundry shoved into the washing machine. spin rinse cycle. we go through our steps and phases of life just like the machine goes through its. we evolve into humans, it changes to rinse. when the buzzer goes off we are tugged out and thrown into the dryer called eternity. "

the way i see evolution and life as it is, fits into the cycle of a washing machine. each specie is another load tossed into the machine, and we go through our stages (evolution) until the buzzer goes off (death/extinction) then we are tossed aside, into the dryer...i believe that afterlife comes eternity. just like before you were born you have no recollection, it's just nothing.

"like moving to the top of the bleachers in a conversation with friends, we evolve from our lowest form to our highest. perfection. then it fails. perfect is a figment of our imagination to keep us striving to better ourselves. but when we reach that highest level of humanity, we are tossed in the dryer to burn the perfection from our skin."

i believe we evolve to the most perfect beings we possibly can, and then it falls. like the roman empire, it was 'perfect' but it fell. dinosaurs...they had no problems with the world...but they fell. everything rises to as high as it can go and then it falls. as we were havign this discussion last night we noticed that we were gradually moving up the bleachers, which is where this came from.



just a little insight behind the song. thanks for the feedback. this was written just once and off the top of my head.